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Dickard. 08-22-05 01:40 AM

Death Row
 
Confused trapped in a sensless state of mind
One of a kind cant be defined running out of time
Sentenced ta 2 years on death row its set so
Why not die now end my life now just let go
Set free of the demons put my life ta peace
Not worth living knowing no chance of release
Life cut short dying is my constant thought
My life is coming to a stop just cuz I was caught
Trapped behind these bars for my last site of life
No reason to complain no reason to put up a fight
The pain will end soon as the line gets shorter
I have no set bail thanks to the court order
Death is a heavy sentence get you thinking a lot
How life can come to an end then ur life is forgot
Im not proud of what I did or glad that it happened
Jail had got me thinkin common sence has snapped in
This cell that im trapped in has got outsiders laughin
The day of my death has come settle me down with rum
People pay to see my death, seeing me die for fun?
Down to my last breath strapped in ready for death
As I replay the memories of how I got in this mess
They insert the poision I feel it entering my body
I have no other thoughts other than I truly am sorry
*STOPS BREATHING IS NOW DEAD*

Dickard. 08-22-05 01:42 AM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193187

Sick. 08-22-05 09:54 AM

wow..... im actually impressed
really felt emotion and had great imagery
i felt like i was in prison with him and i was there when he got killed
damn.. 8/10.. best yet by far.. keep it up

Dickard. 08-22-05 12:27 PM

^^thanks man much appreciated fo reall still uppin for more feed

Dickard. 08-22-05 04:17 PM

still uppin for proper feed...dont sleep on this people

Dickard. 08-23-05 01:17 PM

yo dont sleep fam, drop some feed!

Dizzee Rascal 08-23-05 01:20 PM

Ayo return favour on my piece ight??
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...883#post2386883

well ur piece,
Yeah was a nice lil piece, def got ur flow down i feel though u could enhance it by throwing mad multis that aint mono syllabic all around the piece instead of just some normal multis nah mean??

Sentenced ta 2 years on death row its set so
Why not die now end my life now just let go

Fav bar of the piece

Def some nice emotion and imagery in perhaps some similes coukd enhance it 2
ayo respect
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Dickard. 08-23-05 03:36 PM

much appreciated^^still uppin

Dickard. 08-24-05 03:30 PM

upping...........god

Dickard. 08-24-05 06:37 PM

finally lol thanks man :thumbup: .....still uppin!

Dickard. 08-24-05 10:53 PM

no doubt no doubt still uppin

Christianite 08-25-05 12:19 AM

this was good, imagery and emotion were really good, flow and structure were good, was really feelin this man, keep em coming

Dickard. 08-25-05 12:20 AM

thanks man appreciate it!!


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