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Lost In The Music
Lost In The Music...
I get so lost in my music which makes me let all the pain go no interruptions complete serenity nothin mess up the flow i just start slowly thinkin and the words will just come on out get so deep into it that i'll probably never gettin off this route feelin like i wanna shout and let the world know of my words reelin them in tellin them the truth maybe cause some alerts so i fall deeper nothing can touch me im paintin perfect pictures kinda like Van Gogh im on my own aint gon be no gettin witcha no one gonna help me on my path dont kno how long i can last it but im gonna straight blast it until the day i reach my casket makin a racket im gonna bang this hip hop till the very end unless i die by the 187 i guess then i'll have to do it in heaven i will rap until the world is destroyed and that is one of my vows so i bow to legends and maybe i'll follow thier paths and be allowed to make crowds stand to thier feet and be loud bouncin with me cant u see im connected and that this is where im supposed to be in a state of elated bliss like its pure ecstasy and im loving it straight thuggin it there aint no love in this world no huggin it rappin and all of hip hop is im my blood and i will never refuse it so i guess for the rest of my life i'll always be lost in the music |
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This piece was iight.........you were too basic on the vocab and the flow was
like i was reading but the imagry and some emotion stood out in a few areas the structure of this piece was decent i like it overall just the flow and the vocab that could've really be betta ya kno |
this was all right bu tyuou're lacking vocab multi's and wordplay check this homey
bitter situations brings about consideration lost in the music but its false to use it just to escape reality a great fatilty can occur |
Aight thanks guys for the feed. Just to let u kno this was my first open mic. So i kno i got a lot of work to do.
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