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Speats Featuring GKillaz- Something True
SPEATS: Its been a while that i had to say this................ I tryed suicide, life aint something to play with/ I noticed that when i lost some people i once knew Its been so sad, that i didnt know what to do........./ I wanted to kill my soul and reach them in heaven Noone knows me really, its been a long time coming/ i know this kid who crys about his dad raping him Just because the dude couldnt hang out with other womens/ Im just here to spread the truth, its nothing to joke with I still see people talking and laughting about it/ GKILLAZ: The world is always revolvin'... life just keeps on evolvin'.... Starvation across the earth problems we try to be solvin'... Men abusin' women cars killin' the globe wit pollution... All these problems and the goverment has no solution... Revolutions in danger its up to the people to make a change... Respect strangers give homeless people your spare change... Deranged fools blowin' up skewls, where our kids learn... How they goin' to grow up to be somethin' if there eduction burns... Still no one shows any conern there to busy in there own world... Wont stop to care until somethin' happens to there boy or girl... http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2553608 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2553614 |
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I liked you beginin' but the last parts got a bit off flow, like the rhymes were forced into it. The other guys verse was nice, good vocab adn ncie flow expect for when he rhymed change with the same word again.
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I liked it! The vocab was good, a lil off on the multis other than that I would give it a 7.5/10!
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yo Ill Technique I didnt rhyme the same word twice, because lookin' for a change, and spare change have two differnt meanings.
Thx for the feedback y'all. |
may not have the same meaning but exact spellin in the word
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that doesnt matter, as long as it has a differnt meanin' it still isnt that great but it would have been worse if I used the same meanin'.
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speats:your verse was ok, opener was decent,
was feelin the forced rhymin thou, that kinda hurt it in places, some lines in your verse were kinda choppy but still conveyed your concept.. . gkillaz:your verse was good, better one of the two your flow was helped a lil by the repetative same soundin syllable words you used, you kept it consistent.. your closer was the best part of both verses.. . n i say same soundin syllable words cuz multi's are achieved by 2 or more words consecutivly, . decent piece guys...rtf on my om... |
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good emotion, nice beggining in your verse speats. Slowly got a bit weaker thru out, buit all in you had a solid verse.
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Look SPEATS you shook on streets so you write lame
Can’t make the hood tame why protect your good name? Rhyme not thrilling and deft why talk of killing yourself? Look your true pride fried just to talk of suicide no wealth In this, should be teeming with life not steaming with strife Become a quitter quick when there’s bitter conflict a knife Maybe useful and advice can be crucial so keep it on the down low Your stats collide and about the cats that died how do you know They landed in Heaven? A place of delight and peace but yo In hell they have to fight the beast so chill homey have a cup of coco And you call me whack the tall fact is your rhyme didn’t make sense homey |
somebody kill him ^^^^
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Gladbag gets your trash into the dumpster, and not my thread. or Speats.
Fuckin' NOOB! |
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