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just some shit that whent together i guess
i woke up walked down the steps
little did i know i would sharley regret early i met my chest to a dagger reaching for the ledge as i mysteriously stagger down each of the stairs vision impered justly i stared at a knife turned around quickly & swiftly ended a life the life i ended was indeed the life of my wife quickly i ran to the phone picking up amo like that gangsta capone cops said it was a sex scandle son put down the weapon soon as i did bullets started connecting parting inspection cop caught in the eye by a inlarging erection can you see my bush it's the newest election my anger exsploading road ranger is golden anything in life just isn't worth holding enless you now what you gonna do wit it latter 9 bullets caught by fifty just because of a hatter call me your dady cuz im big popa darth vader sooner or latter you gotta cope with the truth nin inch gators skin on the slope of my roof mink coating pearls all over my dash when i bend over see my gold plated ass i wish this cold last but it's time for the ending just like your g/f with the money im spending |
uppin..................uppin..............uppin... .......... for feedback hit me up ppl
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why r u cloging tha forum????????????i know yer postin linkz but make yer pieces bigger there short and cluittering this thread
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oh my bad homes i'll stop writing for a while k
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no man dont stop writing lmao just make yer oms longer so u dont have to drop so often then they would be better werd lol at u sayin youll stop i never said that jus make em longer and def dont stop writing.........................eazy
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Hmm....I hated this piece kinda...I mean you okay...But you just need to elevate n all...I mean longer lines...And well just elevate manye...Nice topic n all But just elevate...
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they can post as often as they want but they didnt post links
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it was a tip make em longer and work more on o one piece..............rahter then drop a bunch of shit no one will look at
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i feel you braw thanx for the addvice from all yaw good lookin
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You can post as many times as you want but id have to agree with non. but i see you editted your post..now drop two links..and ill leave feedback.
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AW MAN NOT RAP IT WAS GOOD YOU STARTED OF RAPPING WITH THESE MULTI-RHYMING LINES THEN YOU FELL OFF THIS PART WAS GOOD KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
i woke up walked down the steps little did i know i would sharley regret early i met my chest to a dagger reaching for the ledge as i mysteriously stagger down each of the stairs vision impered justly i stared at a knife turned around quickly & swiftly ended a life the life i ended was indeed the life of my wife quickly i ran to the phone picking up amo like that gangsta capone AND I THINK THIS IS WHAT THE MODERATERS SHOULD BE DOING HELPING PEOPLE INSTEAD OF MOVING POSTS AND TELLING THEM TO DROP LINKS |
i agree nice feed man thanx
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