i woke up walked down the steps
little did i know i would sharley regret
early i met my chest to a dagger
reaching for the ledge as i mysteriously stagger
down each of the stairs vision impered justly i stared
at a knife turned around quickly & swiftly ended a life
the life i ended was indeed the life of my wife
quickly i ran to the phone picking up amo like that gangsta capone
cops said it was a sex scandle son put down the weapon
soon as i did bullets started connecting parting inspection
cop caught in the eye by a inlarging erection
can you see my bush it's the newest election
my anger exsploading road ranger is golden
anything in life just isn't worth holding
enless you now what you gonna do wit it latter
9 bullets caught by fifty just because of a hatter
call me your dady cuz im big popa darth vader
sooner or latter you gotta cope with the truth
nin inch gators skin on the slope of my roof
mink coating pearls all over my dash
when i bend over see my gold plated ass
i wish this cold last but it's time for the ending
just like your g/f with the money im spending

uppin..................uppin..............uppin... .......... for feedback hit me up ppl

why r u cloging tha forum????????????i know yer postin linkz but make yer pieces bigger there short and cluittering this thread

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oh my bad homes i'll stop writing for a while k

no man dont stop writing lmao just make yer oms longer so u dont have to drop so often then they would be better werd lol at u sayin youll stop i never said that jus make em longer and def dont stop writing.........................eazy

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Hmm....I hated this piece kinda...I mean you okay...But you just need to elevate n all...I mean longer lines...And well just elevate manye...Nice topic n all But just elevate...
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Wicked One vs C-Bo

they can post as often as they want but they didnt post links

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it was a tip make em longer and work more on o one piece..............rahter then drop a bunch of shit no one will look at

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i feel you braw thanx for the addvice from all yaw good lookin

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That's from the rules thread.

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Blow It - Topical

AW MAN NOT RAP IT WAS GOOD YOU STARTED OF RAPPING WITH THESE MULTI-RHYMING LINES THEN YOU FELL OFF THIS PART WAS GOOD KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK

i woke up walked down the steps
little did i know i would sharley regret
early i met my chest to a dagger
reaching for the ledge as i mysteriously stagger
down each of the stairs vision impered justly i stared
at a knife turned around quickly & swiftly ended a life
the life i ended was indeed the life of my wife
quickly i ran to the phone picking up amo like that gangsta capone

AND I THINK THIS IS WHAT THE MODERATERS SHOULD BE DOING HELPING PEOPLE INSTEAD OF MOVING POSTS AND TELLING THEM TO DROP LINKS