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.Running.
..Chris is back.
n' he writes.. ..gota be some reason I'm not dead..devil must had sent me back ......to do what I do.. yo.. ..I walked into a home for the blind stole sunglass n stared in eyes N' stole some rollerblades stuck em on a guy who was paralyzed I'll spare the wise..the pain of a slow death haunts the minds A taunt implys....nothin at all jus a trick to stomp ya sides I was perched ontop a oak waitin with a sharpened pole to inflict pain the dog was barkin up the wrong tree so I speared it in the rib cage jumped down and wanted half its knowledge so I took a knife n split brain my hits vein, n' everything I writ's game..I'm insane and crazy you tell a joke..I cut myself..why not kill you? na I'm in pain and lazy Na you no I'm not serious, I'd probably toss a propane tank at you wait for you to catch it and shoot it with my nine to spray fire n gas you I'll spray myself with a extinguisher jus for the rush of tryin to save you Then run past your burnin body with a fire blanket to laugh n mame you Bust my teeth wit a tire iron, when they find our ashes can't name two I'll enslave your pets with un-ethical behavior na you know im trickin now this guy ain't gay just when a babe comes he's got hands out dick down a bitch clown, savy for dick I'll rip your tits off hollow em n make a hat leave your fate in tact, toss paint all over your body till ur painted black slaughtered a rabbit for fun..yea remember the fact cuz it shys from funny but its part of my plan..grab a drum n paint it..call me the energizer bunny y does no body love me?..who cares Im hate ful n twisted, jus stuck up I am surrounded by death..I got a canary with just legs..screamin STFU! I'm hateful to hero's..I'm a bitch to of an opponent..the throttle is thicker push it til I can't b stoped,went to a homeless guy, took his bottle a liquor drank it all n' as he watched curiously I smiled..smahsed it on his face I'm lost in this world I'm always gunnin see.. I went to national track meet with glock nine screamin.. WHY YOU RUNNIN FROM MEE!!!... Brraattt Braatttt..*gun shots n screams*... My Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3155422 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3155428 |
yo i waz feelin this man, consistent wit tha style and sum nice multiz but ya need to step them up a bit man, sum horrorcore shit in there, i used to do a lotta that stuff on tha txt battle scene....... good stuff man..... i liked tha story too.. keep spittin
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yeah liked the story, and got good flow. good shit man
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i think it would ok in the begining but then it started to get dumb especially when you said
:"this guy ain't gay just when a babe comes he's got hands out dick down a bitch clown, savy for dick I'll rip your tits off hollow em n make a hat" http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3157044 |
Ah thanks for the feedback, ahh this was just one of those write down whatever dumb thing that comes to my head kind of om's..lol appreciate the feed though
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haha shit was funny i liked it....good multis to....8/10
favorite lines- the dog was barkin up the wrong tree so I speared it in the rib cage jumped down and wanted half its knowledge so I took a knife n split brain Na you no I'm not serious, I'd probably toss a propane tank at you wait for you to catch it and shoot it with my nine to spray fire n gas you I'll spray myself with a extinguisher jus for the rush of tryin to save you Then run past your burnin body with a fire blanket to laugh n mame you |
Lol thanks for the feed like always..
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The multis were good, the lines were original, but the style wasn't. It seemed really eminemish. I know it's unfair, but that style screams eminem whenever anyone does. The random demented humor thing :( It was good, maybe if you record it I could refrain from hearing Eminems voice when I hear it. You're good though, I give this like a 7/10 Keep droppin and I'll stalk you.
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to tell tha true you may be one of tha most.... consistant on tha site... nice drop.... I like tha multi's homie... keep doing tha shit
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nice little multie action man....
wish you showed up for the league man cus your booted but this here is a nice drop real creative man. |
Yea my bad about that, I couldn't drop cuz I went to FL for spring break. But thanks for the feed...n' yea I like em so if my style seems a bit like him..its cuz I think its funny. lol i have fun writin it..
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well if you want back int the league let me know right now with your word that you'll show up!
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ahh this was pretty dope. I liked readin it, lol ya had some nice multi's..n the story made it so much better.^you should go back in the league dude.
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