feelings turn bad
 

the first day i woke my life was ready to be choked
and now i feel smoked really wish i never awoke
growin up dis way i never thought this could be me
you could never understand what kind of things i see
cuz all i see is an empty world and go from day 2 day
wish we could all fuck away instead of livin afraid
and it's 2 bad we got families we know we cant relie on
dont be fooled by em der my enemies i cant take sight off
wot do u do when the fuckers wont even let you be
do u understand wot ur doin ur makin me wanna leave
but leave for good cuz i feel misunderstood
u really stood on me id kill u if i really could
but is it worth it bitch u peope look down on me like im worthless
but when u take a hard look at urself why u think u got a purpous
cuz we're all the same the weaker ones dont speak a word
we just dont give a fuck we just pretend we never heard

thats really deep.. i like this peace... it was good...shows alot of troubles u have or had now and in ur past... first 4 lines were dope. very impacting and creative.... to my eyes anyways. i say u make ur pieces longer... ive noticed u make them only 16 lines. well make 48 lines and kick in a chorus... be a little better.. i look at this as only the tip of the ice berge of what u really want to say and express... keep it up hommes. pretty dope shit..

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Technique, this was a descent drop. I did not really see any clever word usage or anything that stood out from the other drops, but you remained on topic very well and did a good job with the deliverance of this passage.

this probably has bin ur best drop!!! keep it up!!! try writing sumthing that has nothing to do with ur mum or family in it!! find a new topic and work from there ai8t.peace