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Dapreshun 10-20-07 12:52 AM

Check it out... not finished... but need feedback
 
I tear shit down
And I rip shit up
If you dont like ma style
Nigga i dont give a fuck
Ima stick on mine
You could say that Im stuck
And I gets lots of chicks
So I know you hear the cluck
And im built ford tough
Like a brand new truck
With the steel on the sidelines
Damn right I got mines
Damn right I might shine
Bright like head lights
Stop you like red lights
Or like a stopsign
Cause with these tite rhymes
You would wanna think twice
Dont try to take my lines
I dont believe in free bites
Im 2 wheelin it,
but I aint never said bikes
I'll roll on you bitch,
but I aint never said dice
Hot like spice, turn ya white like rice
And niggas'll do anything for the right price

10-20-07 02:28 AM

Pay me and I'll leave feedback.







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Nah nah actually haha I'm just here to tell you to leave links.

You got 'till midnight! :)

T lite 11-01-07 02:38 PM

Bars were too short, and the topic was very basic and weak. Write on a hotter topic, expand your bars, and you should be aight.


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