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MuhThugga 04-28-03 08:55 PM

I Lost a Family Member Over Spring Break
 
I lost a family member
She was 13 years old
And something broke inside of her and pierced the side of her heart
I was inside of her when it happened
Maybe I pushed her too hard, maybe it was her time to go
But as the paramedics came and said, "There is nothing we can do"
I knew it was over
Ah, I remember being in awe of her beauty as she waited patiently for me
All day, waiting for me to get inside of her
Maybe I took advantage of this 13 year old beauty
But whenever I was inside, I could hear wonderful music
as each movement of my stick drew her wild
and I listened to her moan
I remember going out and being with her during school. Those were special moments
Everything disappeared when I was inside. Just me and her
But now those moments are gone with the beats of her heart
My stick no longer arouses her pleasure
The music still plays ever so faintly, but it too is not the same with out her
I sit now and watch as she no longer waits for me, never again will she urge for a ride
Never again will this thirteen year old family member of mine
ask me to get inside
But as she laid there dead, I couldn't help but give into temptation
I opened her entrance one last time, and entered her for the sake of a dead thrill
Yes it was soft, but I felt nothing
no vibrations from her anymore, nothing to stimulate me
She just lay there motionless as I tried to bring her back to life
And I pulled out, realizing all attempts were in vain
And I just stared at her as the music died, and the serrenading sounds left from my ear
and I left all hope behind with the body, but even at death it still looked so beautiful
And I shed a tear as I quickly turned away. She was my first and only experience
And now she has been taken away
Gone forever, repair impossible
So I no longer have sensations, I no longer hear any music when I'm inside of her
Farewell, my 13 year old beauty.... you were my family





I'll really miss that car

varentao 04-29-03 01:33 PM

Fairly well written...

....you got into the subject well...kept the reader going...kept the topic going...started to go here and there at times, off at times..


....but still well written, and fairly original tooin a way...and a nice twist at the end...nicely ended..

..resp...

Buffyangellover1 04-29-03 04:22 PM

Just this is what I think Why where you sleeping with a 13 year old girl ? Well It was written well and it was good .

MuhThugga 04-29-03 07:10 PM

hanks...I just kind of wrote it on the spot........

Tsar Casm 04-29-03 09:44 PM

OMG AT FRIST I THOUGHT U WERE ON THAT R KELLY STUFF TILL U SAID I REALLY MISS THAT CAR THANK GOD LOL BUT I LIKED IT STILL EVEN THOUGH IT WAS SICK HAHAHA WAS WELL WRITTEN

X Ecution 04-29-03 11:48 PM

got me till the end...damn had me hooked goodshyt 1

SeeKret 04-30-03 06:45 PM

all i can say is jesus christ

Dez 04-30-03 06:50 PM

lol i though you were talking about your sister or some shit. thank god.

OpTiKaL iLuZion 05-01-03 01:36 AM

yea man nice job FUCKING WIT MY HEAD haha


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