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I Lost a Family Member Over Spring Break
IP: 2DF8 44D6
I lost a family member
She was 13 years old And something broke inside of her and pierced the side of her heart I was inside of her when it happened Maybe I pushed her too hard, maybe it was her time to go But as the paramedics came and said, "There is nothing we can do" I knew it was over Ah, I remember being in awe of her beauty as she waited patiently for me All day, waiting for me to get inside of her Maybe I took advantage of this 13 year old beauty But whenever I was inside, I could hear wonderful music as each movement of my stick drew her wild and I listened to her moan I remember going out and being with her during school. Those were special moments Everything disappeared when I was inside. Just me and her But now those moments are gone with the beats of her heart My stick no longer arouses her pleasure The music still plays ever so faintly, but it too is not the same with out her I sit now and watch as she no longer waits for me, never again will she urge for a ride Never again will this thirteen year old family member of mine ask me to get inside But as she laid there dead, I couldn't help but give into temptation I opened her entrance one last time, and entered her for the sake of a dead thrill Yes it was soft, but I felt nothing no vibrations from her anymore, nothing to stimulate me She just lay there motionless as I tried to bring her back to life And I pulled out, realizing all attempts were in vain And I just stared at her as the music died, and the serrenading sounds left from my ear and I left all hope behind with the body, but even at death it still looked so beautiful And I shed a tear as I quickly turned away. She was my first and only experience And now she has been taken away Gone forever, repair impossible So I no longer have sensations, I no longer hear any music when I'm inside of her Farewell, my 13 year old beauty.... you were my family I'll really miss that car Last edited by MuhThugga : 04-28-03 at 08:58 PM. |
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IP: BFE5 28C7
Fairly well written...
....you got into the subject well...kept the reader going...kept the topic going...started to go here and there at times, off at times.. ....but still well written, and fairly original tooin a way...and a nice twist at the end...nicely ended.. ..resp... |
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IP: 975E 0C6B
Just this is what I think Why where you sleeping with a 13 year old girl ? Well It was written well and it was good .
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Middle Weight
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IP: 2DF8 44D6
hanks...I just kind of wrote it on the spot........
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Over Weight
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IP: 5153 3B92
OMG AT FRIST I THOUGHT U WERE ON THAT R KELLY STUFF TILL U SAID I REALLY MISS THAT CAR THANK GOD LOL BUT I LIKED IT STILL EVEN THOUGH IT WAS SICK HAHAHA WAS WELL WRITTEN
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IP: 4577 CD9A
got me till the end...damn had me hooked goodshyt 1
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The Real American Idol
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IP: 4577 CD9A
all i can say is jesus christ
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Go ahead. Turn your back on me. Thats when I punch you in the back of your head. Faggot. Fuck wit me once, shame on you. Fuck wit me twice, youre dead. |
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IP: C50F 4B9D
lol i though you were talking about your sister or some shit. thank god.
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IP: DDFB F048
yea man nice job FUCKING WIT MY HEAD haha
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