Heaven
 

I already posted this, just wanted to poll it...

And did those feet in ancient time
Walk upon Heaven's mountains green?
And was the holy Lamb of God
On Heaven's pleasant pastures seen?

And did the Countenance Divine
Shine forth upon our clouded hills?
And was Heaven built here
Among these dark Satanic Mills?

Bring me my bow of burning gold
Bring me my arrows of desire
Bring me my spear, clouds, unfold
Bring me my chariot of fire

Heaven was not, nor will be built
Jerusalem or Washington, hate and guilt
Religion does not prosper here, only violent beliefs
But heaven, a place so far away, has fought away from grief

I will not cease from mental fight,
Nor shall my gun sleep in my hand
Till I have built our Heaven
In Heaven's green and welcome land.

What do you think people, just want some insight...

as i said before, thats the type of poem that is remembered for years, the type of stuff you'd see in a poetry book.

yea this was a good poem... I agree with Stark on this one but... thats the poems that gets put in books not the ones that get remembered... the poems that get remembered are ones like "Close Call" which was posted in the foruma while bk... but stay up

Peace

Thanks fo' the input, uppin' fo' mo' ideas...

definitely good....this is the kind of piece that would not be forgotten for the rest of time....

i love it...the concept awed me...

Thanks, good to see i'm appreciated!

Any mo' Ideas?