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Old 06-08-03, 12:51 PM   #1
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Heaven

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I already posted this, just wanted to poll it...

And did those feet in ancient time
Walk upon Heaven's mountains green?
And was the holy Lamb of God
On Heaven's pleasant pastures seen?

And did the Countenance Divine
Shine forth upon our clouded hills?
And was Heaven built here
Among these dark Satanic Mills?

Bring me my bow of burning gold
Bring me my arrows of desire
Bring me my spear, clouds, unfold
Bring me my chariot of fire

Heaven was not, nor will be built
Jerusalem or Washington, hate and guilt
Religion does not prosper here, only violent beliefs
But heaven, a place so far away, has fought away from grief

I will not cease from mental fight,
Nor shall my gun sleep in my hand
Till I have built our Heaven
In Heaven's green and welcome land.

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Old 06-08-03, 12:54 PM   #2
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What do you think people, just want some insight...
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Old 06-08-03, 02:57 PM   #3
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as i said before, thats the type of poem that is remembered for years, the type of stuff you'd see in a poetry book.
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Old 06-08-03, 03:49 PM   #4
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yea this was a good poem... I agree with Stark on this one but... thats the poems that gets put in books not the ones that get remembered... the poems that get remembered are ones like "Close Call" which was posted in the foruma while bk... but stay up

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Old 06-09-03, 05:32 PM   #5
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Thanks fo' the input, uppin' fo' mo' ideas...
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Old 06-09-03, 05:41 PM   #6
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definitely good....this is the kind of piece that would not be forgotten for the rest of time....

i love it...the concept awed me...
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Old 06-11-03, 03:14 PM   #7
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Thanks, good to see i'm appreciated!
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Old 06-12-03, 12:38 PM   #8
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Any mo' Ideas?
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