Remember me mom
 

yo mom i missing you, i was a little kid when you left me in '92, im not even sure of who im writing too, i know every day you look at me from the sky, believing one day together we will be able to ride, for the first time i will cry that day, i know it will happen cause it will hurt too much if it couldnt be that way, it has to its what the preachers say, i still remember when dad came home and started to loose it, he told me the news, i was confused, and i looked for a hollow tip, till this day i still cant acknowledge it, mom i remember you telling me to stay away from drugs and gun, thats what i did mom im clean, but its costing me alot of fun, its ok though cause everyday i go by your image, thats how it will be even when i am finished, i hear voices in my head, is that you mom, your telling me when im up at 12 to go to bed, i go to sleep hearing a lullabye, what you dont see is my eyes,mom, i begin to cry, i wonder why, why would the lord take something so caring, you taught me how to love, no cussing, and sharing, i wll never forget you mom cause youll always be alive in my heart, i've done some good things in my life and i know its not because of dad cause hes not very smart, thanks for everything mom, you are still caring for me, in the future i hope you watch over me so you could see a family forming, ill miss you.

a heartfelt piece, but you need to put bars in there to make it easier to read and you need to up the vocab something drastic, some very basic rhymes in this piece. the imagry was good though, pup the vocab a little and maybe add multis and you will have this polished.