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filed 09-30-03 04:51 PM

mirrior image
 
the mirror i look in shows no traces of me, only depressed shades of gray
misplaced makeup plastered to this reflected face of cracked cold stone
how did i lose track of myself, its like mistaking cold nights for warm day
i cant begin to discribe myself, who i deep inside somewhere truly am
WHERE DID I GO IN THESE LOST DAYS

i feel like ive cheated out my sister, sold her a fake, coz shes my biggest fan
Mother says she looks up to me, gonna grow up to be actually like you
so does that mean she'll be as messed up and lost with herself like me
or am i now what she'll someday suppose to be
could i possibly be living her life not mine
and to her this will all be wonderful, perfectly fine
all i know in this here is someone else taken my soul over
ive finally relized that this life i live is way over my shoulders
........OVER MY HEAD

i cant belive that ive let ppl control my thoughts, my mind
but i didnt see it, feel it, now im no where that i can find
ive lost track of myself over these forgotten fraud years
living a life as someone else, losing my dreams, forgetting my fears
ive lived a life in someone elses uncomfortable used shoes
two sizes to small, yet i squeezed myself, pushed my way in
thinking that becoming this creature meant i did win
but looking in the mirror i relise now the truth, i did lose
i lost an unimanginable ammont of years in my life
to become something that is not who i am
just who the media wants my soul to be
CANT YOU SEE NOW
i let ads and tv take me over, i let them ruin MY life

just alot of thoughts right now, fooling around with them some

~Tera~
DONT HATE

Saint Shizzle 10-01-03 09:08 PM

dayum this should not be slept on....this is amazing.....i can say i know how it is to have a bunch of emotions goin on at once....i thought this was rather clear.....emotion was obviously amazing....i hope i can write like this sometime

filed 10-02-03 04:11 PM

thanks really appreciate it!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

filed 10-03-03 09:17 PM

uppin

Chrit 10-03-03 09:28 PM

Hmm...

I dont know much about poetry so I'll try to keep this simple...

A lot of emotion here... I think it was transeferred very well into the topic...

Good vocab. and etc...

Nice piece

filed 10-04-03 07:47 PM

thanks for the reply i really appreciate it

~Tera~
DONT HATE

Content 10-04-03 09:25 PM

Filed....im sorry for never replying to anyhting of yours and
you have taken the time out to drop your thoughts on my
pieces and its appreciated forreal forreal

you streached this topic out very well...seeing an alter ego
in the mirror was definately a good way of doing things..
calling what your seeing a sister...distorted on the inside
and things of that nature...this sounds childish but the
happy face only shows on the outside as the frown
is always something that your aware of...this is something
that many can relate to and this was an enjoyable read

way to represent and once again I appologize for not lookin

la paz

evilbombsquad 10-05-03 12:39 AM

dayum ya emotions gott me with this 1, like whoa. i could tell ya were speakin straight from heart. the 1st line in ya 2nd verse gott to me so damn well. im litteraly lost foe expression. stay up with this and keep droppin

peAce

filed 10-05-03 04:54 PM

thx all, content its no biggie and thx again

~Tera~
DONT HATE


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