quick toss, jus hit me up and let me know what yall think!
 

They convicted me cause my mind is damented/
Ya kids cant listen to me cause I've been represented/
I would scream and shout like a turitz bitch but I am calm and collected/
From the dirrty to New York I am greatly respected/
If I collected all the starz in the sky it created me, the comitt/My flowz are so Ill I made ya sick and had u vomitt/
My flows are like a freight train u jus cant stop it/
Motorola lost the phone and made u create a dial tone/
I got more flows than Cannibus and Capone/
Subliminal indisisive crimal thoughts made me invisible/
Bein chased by siminoles had an incridible effect but made my invincible/ Twisted fist hit ya in ur jaw/ inlisted kids spit best u ever saw/ Like dykes ya crew keeps a low cut/ And like ya dad and bikes u take it up the but/ Revised rhymes got me dispiced by many/ it head or tail bitch pick up ya pennies/ Ghostface got u displaced and re-arranged/ Preist makes beats in da streets havin ya deranged/ SO listen to my story with no worries/ But try to pay attention unless u cant afford me/

not a bad open mic had good flow and some good rhymes. Sometimes it got a little hard to follow but easy to get back on track. I like this open mic but i'd like to hear you talk about something besides how good u are which you can do next time but for the topic it was good. Hit my open mic up its called THE WORLD IS MINE aight Peace
-KeMy$t

you had some nice flow but u need to keep your structure consistent through the whole flow. this was an alright piece just try and keep your structure consistent.

holla

this had no topic other than you spittin a bunch of random shit, you should elevate some more and keep tryin.~1~

i thought this was a weak drop, i agree that there was no topic, this always makes me lose interest to start with, and the flow was pretty hit and miss, with a basic rhyme scheme.......try ahd put more thought in the structure..........but im not hatin.......just trying to help.....peace!!

Thinkin Deva can take me neva will he shake me! The bitch has dum dum flows/ This bitch can eat a clit or suck a dick, but his midget dick wont grow/ And bitch ass grass smokin totin non flowin Diverse is worse/ He could spit sick if he had another verse/

lol
j/k

"mean muggin aint nottin but a disgrace unless u got a ghost face"

i done alot more open mics than you, when i was N.D.eva
..............................................oh and what was that wak shit...lmao....if you cant take critisism dont post...........out!

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