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Old 10-17-03, 11:11 PM   #1
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quick toss, jus hit me up and let me know what yall think!

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They convicted me cause my mind is damented/
Ya kids cant listen to me cause I've been represented/
I would scream and shout like a turitz bitch but I am calm and collected/
From the dirrty to New York I am greatly respected/
If I collected all the starz in the sky it created me, the comitt/My flowz are so Ill I made ya sick and had u vomitt/
My flows are like a freight train u jus cant stop it/
Motorola lost the phone and made u create a dial tone/
I got more flows than Cannibus and Capone/
Subliminal indisisive crimal thoughts made me invisible/
Bein chased by siminoles had an incridible effect but made my invincible/ Twisted fist hit ya in ur jaw/ inlisted kids spit best u ever saw/ Like dykes ya crew keeps a low cut/ And like ya dad and bikes u take it up the but/ Revised rhymes got me dispiced by many/ it head or tail bitch pick up ya pennies/ Ghostface got u displaced and re-arranged/ Preist makes beats in da streets havin ya deranged/ SO listen to my story with no worries/ But try to pay attention unless u cant afford me/
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Old 10-17-03, 11:19 PM   #2
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not a bad open mic had good flow and some good rhymes. Sometimes it got a little hard to follow but easy to get back on track. I like this open mic but i'd like to hear you talk about something besides how good u are which you can do next time but for the topic it was good. Hit my open mic up its called THE WORLD IS MINE aight Peace
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Old 10-18-03, 12:40 AM   #3
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you had some nice flow but u need to keep your structure consistent through the whole flow. this was an alright piece just try and keep your structure consistent.

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Old 10-18-03, 03:51 AM   #4
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this had no topic other than you spittin a bunch of random shit, you should elevate some more and keep tryin.~1~
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Old 10-18-03, 10:06 AM   #5
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i thought this was a weak drop, i agree that there was no topic, this always makes me lose interest to start with, and the flow was pretty hit and miss, with a basic rhyme scheme.......try ahd put more thought in the structure..........but im not hatin.......just trying to help.....peace!!
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Old 10-18-03, 12:27 PM   #6
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Thinkin Deva can take me neva will he shake me! The bitch has dum dum flows/ This bitch can eat a clit or suck a dick, but his midget dick wont grow/ And bitch ass grass smokin totin non flowin Diverse is worse/ He could spit sick if he had another verse/

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Old 10-18-03, 01:37 PM   #7
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i done alot more open mics than you, when i was N.D.eva
..............................................oh and what was that wak shit...lmao....if you cant take critisism dont post...........out!
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Old 10-18-03, 02:20 PM   #8
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