[Profound Burden]
 

[Spoken]
Do you ever feel, the weight of the world?
Bound on your shoulders, a stressful burden,
Sometimes, You know, You wanna shake it off,
But you can’t, all you can do is fight and live with it!

[verse 1]
I Permanently Carry, a 10 Ton Weight…
My Life, Always Has Too Much On it’s Plate…
I’m a Social Misfit, a Fish Outta Water…
Keep On Choking, Reminiscing The days –
I–knew-My-Father, But He’d Rather…
Stay In The Pub n’ Endlessly Drink..
He’d Come Home, With A ‘Tenants’ Stink..
He Just Doesn’t Think, About His Actions…
Then He’s Surprised By Our Painful Reactions…
Astonished At The Way I Glaringly Acted…
He Said He’d Come See My Play Soccer – He Got Distracted…

[hook x2]
I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World…
Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled…
After All I’m Only A Human Being..
I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing…

[verse 2]
Why Can I Still Feel This Psychological Pain..
Can I Maintain This Mind Balance, or Just –
Go-Rationally-Insane, How Can I Explain…
All The Failed Popularity Actions, That Ended In Vain…
I’m A Dog Out In The Rain, Soaked In Stress…
If I Killed Myself, That’d Be One Life Less-
To-Worry-About, I’m A Intellect Drought…
Dry Like The Desert, A Natural Mental Pervert…
I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World…
Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled…
I’m Ready To Spread My Wings And Unfurl…
I Curl Up In A Ball, Like A Hedgehog…
Now I’m Not Afraid To Attack, ha.. Maybe I Lack-
The Mentality To Succeed, This Life I lead…
And Finally Concede To The Weight…
[Gods Already Decided My fate]

[hook x2]
I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World…
Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled…
After All I’m Only A Human Being..
I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing…

[Verse 3]
(2pac:
The Fighting And The Hurting
In My Room Crying Cause I Didn't Want To
Be A Burden)
A Unwanted and Unloved Addition…
Armed Now With A lot More Lyrical Ammunition…
I Was laughed And Teased, When I Wanted To-
Be-A-Poetic-Musician, I’m Like The Electric Magician…
The Retarded Edition, Although A Rhythmical Electrician...
(EDI: I'm Sure You Had Your Reasons Dawg…
I Don't Doubt You, See The Simple Fact Of The-
Matter-Is-They-Don't-Give-a-Fuck-About-You...)
I Know That I’m an Unwanted Entity…
An Unknown Fuck-up, With A Unknown Identity..
Nonentity, I’m A Lyricist Of little Emotional Pity..
In The Words Of Tupac Shakur, Muthafucka…
Goin Insane, Never Die, Live Eternal, Who Shall I Fear?
Don't Shed a Tear For Me Bitch I Ain't Happy Here..

[hook x3]
I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World…
Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled…
After All I’m Only A Human Being..
I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing…

i liked this, took me a few reads to work out the rhymescheme, but its all good :) you stayed on topic well and had some hot multis, my fav verse was your first one though all 3 were hot,

overall good drop, im look out for your stuff in the future,

return the favour and hit this up please,

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86347

i liked the idea behind this, and it was carried out quite well, i didn't feel much for ya hook though. it was the weakest towards the begining and as i read down it got stronger...all in all liked it.........gone keep it up

uppin' dis shit.

This was a nice piece.. But i felt you didnt' need to set it out in a song piece b'cos it would of been a bit short.. But that wasn't a negative thing cuz it didnt detract from how enjoyable it was.. I was feeling what you was writing and the content was well thought about with the flow, vocab and multis.. Props

Peep mine that i'ma post up soon

uppin'

^read the post above for information^

That was a good post, ..


Nice drop, ...with some nice twists in it, ..

The hook was tite, ..like the readin^,...of it, ..

Vocab was.. nice , ...and flow was on point, ..

Enjoyable, good piece..

This was a nice drop... good vocab, multis... my only beef with this post was the line...

'Be-A-Poetic-Musician, I’m Like The Electric Magician…
The Retarded Edition, Although A Rhythmical Electrician...'

Seemed to wordy to me... just sounds like a bunch of words compressed together 'cause they rhymed... you know. Mabye it sounds better than it reads.... Dunno.... Peace...

WHAT COULD BE SAID WAS SAID SO IM THE REMIX EVERY THING WAS ON POINT CONSITENT AND YOU WERE GREATLLY MISSED POP ITS GOOD TO SEE A LEAVE OF ABSCENCE DIDNT HURT YOU RSKILL NONE.STAY UP

^thanx dawg, thanx for the replies^