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[Profound Burden]
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Do you ever feel, the weight of the world? Bound on your shoulders, a stressful burden, Sometimes, You know, You wanna shake it off, But you can’t, all you can do is fight and live with it! [verse 1] I Permanently Carry, a 10 Ton Weight… My Life, Always Has Too Much On it’s Plate… I’m a Social Misfit, a Fish Outta Water… Keep On Choking, Reminiscing The days – I–knew-My-Father, But He’d Rather… Stay In The Pub n’ Endlessly Drink.. He’d Come Home, With A ‘Tenants’ Stink.. He Just Doesn’t Think, About His Actions… Then He’s Surprised By Our Painful Reactions… Astonished At The Way I Glaringly Acted… He Said He’d Come See My Play Soccer – He Got Distracted… [hook x2] I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World… Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled… After All I’m Only A Human Being.. I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing… [verse 2] Why Can I Still Feel This Psychological Pain.. Can I Maintain This Mind Balance, or Just – Go-Rationally-Insane, How Can I Explain… All The Failed Popularity Actions, That Ended In Vain… I’m A Dog Out In The Rain, Soaked In Stress… If I Killed Myself, That’d Be One Life Less- To-Worry-About, I’m A Intellect Drought… Dry Like The Desert, A Natural Mental Pervert… I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World… Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled… I’m Ready To Spread My Wings And Unfurl… I Curl Up In A Ball, Like A Hedgehog… Now I’m Not Afraid To Attack, ha.. Maybe I Lack- The Mentality To Succeed, This Life I lead… And Finally Concede To The Weight… [Gods Already Decided My fate] [hook x2] I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World… Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled… After All I’m Only A Human Being.. I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing… [Verse 3] (2pac: The Fighting And The Hurting In My Room Crying Cause I Didn't Want To Be A Burden) A Unwanted and Unloved Addition… Armed Now With A lot More Lyrical Ammunition… I Was laughed And Teased, When I Wanted To- Be-A-Poetic-Musician, I’m Like The Electric Magician… The Retarded Edition, Although A Rhythmical Electrician... (EDI: I'm Sure You Had Your Reasons Dawg… I Don't Doubt You, See The Simple Fact Of The- Matter-Is-They-Don't-Give-a-Fuck-About-You...) I Know That I’m an Unwanted Entity… An Unknown Fuck-up, With A Unknown Identity.. Nonentity, I’m A Lyricist Of little Emotional Pity.. In The Words Of Tupac Shakur, Muthafucka… Goin Insane, Never Die, Live Eternal, Who Shall I Fear? Don't Shed a Tear For Me Bitch I Ain't Happy Here.. [hook x3] I’m Carrying The Weight Of My World… Into Mental ‘Space’ I Was Violently Hurled… After All I’m Only A Human Being.. I am Emotionally Hurt By The Things I’m Seeing… |
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IP: EE88 2083
i liked this, took me a few reads to work out the rhymescheme, but its all good
![]() overall good drop, im look out for your stuff in the future, return the favour and hit this up please, http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86347 |
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i liked the idea behind this, and it was carried out quite well, i didn't feel much for ya hook though. it was the weakest towards the begining and as i read down it got stronger...all in all liked it.........gone keep it up
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IP: 4514 2C8C
uppin' dis shit.
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IP: 8CA6 9951
This was a nice piece.. But i felt you didnt' need to set it out in a song piece b'cos it would of been a bit short.. But that wasn't a negative thing cuz it didnt detract from how enjoyable it was.. I was feeling what you was writing and the content was well thought about with the flow, vocab and multis.. Props
Peep mine that i'ma post up soon |
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IP: 4514 2C8C
uppin'
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IP: 99C4 603B
^read the post above for information^
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That was a good post, ..
Nice drop, ...with some nice twists in it, .. The hook was tite, ..like the readin^,...of it, .. Vocab was.. nice , ...and flow was on point, .. Enjoyable, good piece..
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IP: F757 E505
This was a nice drop... good vocab, multis... my only beef with this post was the line...
'Be-A-Poetic-Musician, I’m Like The Electric Magician… The Retarded Edition, Although A Rhythmical Electrician...' Seemed to wordy to me... just sounds like a bunch of words compressed together 'cause they rhymed... you know. Mabye it sounds better than it reads.... Dunno.... Peace... |
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IP: 19AF 50C1
WHAT COULD BE SAID WAS SAID SO IM THE REMIX EVERY THING WAS ON POINT CONSITENT AND YOU WERE GREATLLY MISSED POP ITS GOOD TO SEE A LEAVE OF ABSCENCE DIDNT HURT YOU RSKILL NONE.STAY UP
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IP: 4514 2C8C
^thanx dawg, thanx for the replies^
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