Lucid blackness
 

Unaware unknown to many people
My eyes dart faster than catholics to a steeple
Sword unleashed defeat foes over autumn leaves
Let the blood drip mark my areas with the dead
Ahead of your every move I leave every wall red
Called upon by no-one my work is done alone
Home is where I position myself wherever I roam
This life I am one but I am not lonely
Phoney juniors try to emulate but they remain below me
Trained away from your world mentality always focused
The low ruts of society eaten out by a plague of locusts
No hocus pocus this shit will burn ya eyes out
Nobody left standing when my katana flies out
Not tied down that’s the discipline
Never see me natural as autumn leaves rustlin’
Too many names added to the mortuary I represent death
Chest pressed you don’t even get to take a last breath
Known to many cultures but specific to none
I’m content nobody knows where I’m coming from…


The ninja
Look closely to what I bring ya
You linger but your future is set in stone
Watch humanity fall as I ascend the throne
Full of clones
I walk this earth I control this alone


Slipped through shadowless my goal is never out of sight
Outright murder you fall simply outta fright
The night proves my cover blow through like the wind
The vary basis of your moral standing becomes underpinned
The corrupt feel the full blast of the dark form
Poison from a sharp thorn I turn murder into an art form
The stark form I show cause panic among masses
Task-less emotionally blind to death I amass this
My hands stained from the countless deaths to my name
Blame the workings of society to me this killing has no shame
Rich poor to me you all the same
Living in this world accumulate to nothing
Spreading your disease you show no sign of stopping
The temperature is dropping you feel the cold rushing through ya veins
Inane rulings from your leaders you living in a world full of pain
Strong enough to break free? I see your attempts fail miserably
I cut you short save you from living life in misery
The living and the dead accumulate to conquer their fears
Appear by your side I attack those who you feel are near
Wheels of life turning this world in a constant state of change


Aight hit me up. Its still in progress this but tell me what yas all think uptil now. peace

the bottom column was tight but the beginner fallowed lil rhyme scheme.....it was beautifully composed....just odd in scheme but never the less fire

The flow here was a bit choppy here and there....work on the consistency of your words to make sure the piece has a good, consistent flow.

Your vocab was awesome. You described things in depth and painted a picture. I liked that

It's creative because it's not a subject people touch on a lot...overall....

Just make sure that flow isn't choppy at times man...other than that...I like to see more pieces

Yeah this was pretty good.....flow needs some work though, got off at times but still a good piece....add a few more internals and multies to help the flow.....your vocab was real good, nothing wrong there really.....structured it pretty good i thought....overall it was a pretty good piece....keep at it....and keep dropping.

dawg som tight shit in that aiight.Yea tha same as what mmost othas hav been saying the end was tha Best.


Aiight Peace (v)

great concept, great vocab and imagery man. your flow and rhyme scheme was a little broken in places but overall you carried off.

keep posting, keep elavating.

second verse hot, first not, first wa skinda odd, no real pattern, jus goign back to the same sylabble u rhymed on three lines before...it was more of a rant

by the way check out the three open mics by sublime
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i liked the first verse more than the second , it flowed better on a beat... i like yo-vocab, shit's pretty good on da real.. 1