new rap
 

Please believe Im da hottest on the block/
niggas never tellin me to stop/
my standards never drop/
and i dont get down wit suckin on da cock/
makin niggas sick, temperature over a 100 degrees/
mami so hot niggas be beggin on the knees/
wrap it tight, want pleasure not a disease/
for dogs who like it raw, back up nigga please/
dem bitches try to test me/
but im harder than the SAT/
im a real ass chick/
niggas pay me just for touchin on da dick/
got dollas dat buy Gucci kicks/
wear skirts dat fit da hips/
i make sure i drive the hottest whip/
you might can rock a boat/
but can u rock a ship?

Precious Vixen, You as boring as richard nixon, You should listen do this shit dat im spittin, little bitch now listen,

um, elevate should be ur primary objective, use wordplay, complexity, vocabulary, metaphors, multi's...
but it did flow, props on that...

1 Word..Elevate..you need to use more word choice and wordplay..all of this will come with time..just work on it a little..peace