Carpe Diem pt. 1
 

Raise your swords. Engage in arms-bearing mechanics. Hate’s discourse, Trained Marionettes sway with each hand twist/
Working tendencies combined three-toed sloth energy, gaze as the grains slip, disturbed twisted hour glass sand pit/
Disillusionment, locale where the razor met the man’s wrist. Hammock man, conceiving the sun-seizing game plan/
Dreams sauté by a minute panhandle; accumulate for a sinner's sand castle. On this beach sleeps a dinosaur and a caveman/
Practice corroding techniques, Time's barren wasteland; housing projects for daylight kidnapper concepts/
Landlord to strangled alarm clocks and battered watches; plan perceived easy once counting sheep's blood smeared the process/
Pass over me: Sleep, Dreams, and Fantasies
Details layout History palaces, cradle visions holding Time’s security talisman: Achilles’ Heel water hazard/
Envision creaking sound, night tranquillity broke, days captured. Man in Moon combined dangling rope: both sway in the after/
Impatience embraces the raven’s rapture, foreground: victory ritual shadows, POW fashion: hand restriction lassos/
Battle ceremony anticipation, sunset confetti gathered; celebration of moonlight disaster revelation, disappearing sundial pathos/
And both grasp syncopation with a single match stroke. Inspirational motif illusions, soothing visions of icicles, cadavers, rifles, and timeline fuses/
Abusive sunspot lover, invasion strategics retrieved from a once blocked cupboard. Preparations completed with a blade-topped blueprint/
The Eye murdered Lucid in a burdened Silver Town. Pencil attainment, Creativity departure martyr, once a dedication from his final heart murmur filters out/
This one’s for the crack, the pavement, the thousand depressed veteran rally; Hoover Flag unification


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I divided it into parts because this thing will probably be long as all Hell, and also to satisfy whoever keeps IMing me about why I don't post up Open Mics......I'm working on them. I don't want to put out complete garbage.

this was long, but i read it twice because it
was so damn nice. Nice drop man.
8/10

^^Thanks....which is why I chose to divide it up into parts.....

This was a nice drop hommie. I was feeling what you were saying, got my attention real good. I was loven the Vocab hommie, lettin people know you got knowledge. Nice rhyme scheme, it was 2 mixed in one. ( if anyone noticed that ) I liked how you used the words, maybe could have shortend the lines.
That is my only problem, keep droppin shit hommie, nice...

8.5 / 10

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

^^Thanks...

Dayum homez.. I liked that alot, it was nice all the way through.. I've read alot of your stuff and you're good.. keep it up man

carpe diem is latin for what again? damn i take laitn.. is cuk at it :(

^^^^Carpe Diem is Latin for Sieze the Day.....

Thanks for the replies.....

interesting drop dog, seems like you been in the game for a while. keep on droping them flows, i'll be waiting.

Thanks.....

good verse dawg dont ever stop.. you got some talend..8.5/10

Muh...What can I say, I haven't read one of your open mics since Hitler's Letter. But this was really good, I see you focused on many implied metaphors which you have to think about to realize. I haven't seen a good open mic like this in a while, even with the bar structure that old as sin, you made the piece work out wonderfully.

not too bad

okay topic

good vocab

keep postin man

one.........................................

Thanks for the replies....very much appreciated.....

Upper cut.......