Raise your swords. Engage in arms-bearing mechanics. Hate’s discourse, Trained Marionettes sway with each hand twist/
Working tendencies combined three-toed sloth energy, gaze as the grains slip, disturbed twisted hour glass sand pit/
Disillusionment, locale where the razor met the man’s wrist. Hammock man, conceiving the sun-seizing game plan/
Dreams sauté by a minute panhandle; accumulate for a sinner's sand castle. On this beach sleeps a dinosaur and a caveman/
Practice corroding techniques, Time's barren wasteland; housing projects for daylight kidnapper concepts/
Landlord to strangled alarm clocks and battered watches; plan perceived easy once counting sheep's blood smeared the process/
Pass over me: Sleep, Dreams, and Fantasies
Details layout History palaces, cradle visions holding Time’s security talisman: Achilles’ Heel water hazard/
Envision creaking sound, night tranquillity broke, days captured. Man in Moon combined dangling rope: both sway in the after/
Impatience embraces the raven’s rapture, foreground: victory ritual shadows, POW fashion: hand restriction lassos/
Battle ceremony anticipation, sunset confetti gathered; celebration of moonlight disaster revelation, disappearing sundial pathos/
And both grasp syncopation with a single match stroke. Inspirational motif illusions, soothing visions of icicles, cadavers, rifles, and timeline fuses/
Abusive sunspot lover, invasion strategics retrieved from a once blocked cupboard. Preparations completed with a blade-topped blueprint/
The Eye murdered Lucid in a burdened Silver Town. Pencil attainment, Creativity departure martyr, once a dedication from his final heart murmur filters out/
This one’s for the crack, the pavement, the thousand depressed veteran rally; Hoover Flag unification


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I divided it into parts because this thing will probably be long as all Hell, and also to satisfy whoever keeps IMing me about why I don't post up Open Mics......I'm working on them. I don't want to put out complete garbage.

this was long, but i read it twice because it
was so damn nice. Nice drop man.
8/10

^^Thanks....which is why I chose to divide it up into parts.....

This was a nice drop hommie. I was feeling what you were saying, got my attention real good. I was loven the Vocab hommie, lettin people know you got knowledge. Nice rhyme scheme, it was 2 mixed in one. ( if anyone noticed that ) I liked how you used the words, maybe could have shortend the lines.
That is my only problem, keep droppin shit hommie, nice...

8.5 / 10

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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^^Thanks...

Dayum homez.. I liked that alot, it was nice all the way through.. I've read alot of your stuff and you're good.. keep it up man

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carpe diem is latin for what again? damn i take laitn.. is cuk at it

^^^^Carpe Diem is Latin for Sieze the Day.....

Thanks for the replies.....

interesting drop dog, seems like you been in the game for a while. keep on droping them flows, i'll be waiting.

Thanks.....

good verse dawg dont ever stop.. you got some talend..8.5/10

Muh...What can I say, I haven't read one of your open mics since Hitler's Letter. But this was really good, I see you focused on many implied metaphors which you have to think about to realize. I haven't seen a good open mic like this in a while, even with the bar structure that old as sin, you made the piece work out wonderfully.

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not too bad

okay topic

good vocab

keep postin man

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Thanks for the replies....very much appreciated.....