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Old 03-19-05, 03:09 PM   #1
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Kesse vs FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

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Verbal Emotion's Round II

This Is The Second Round For Verbal Emotions..But if you no show you will have your post cut in half. You Must Vote in 2 other battles after you post yours or you will be DQ’d and will have your post cut in half.


Check In’s Due Before Tuesday March 22
Verses Due Before Thursday March 25
First to 3 Votes Win’s..
2-0 = KO
20-30 Lines Max
Remember, everything is in Pacific Time.
If you do not know what that is then too bad.


Topic: Good Fortune

Do not complain about the topic, becuase if ya are good topical heads they ya can write about any topic, but if you don't know what the topic means then simply PM me and i will explain what the topic means, but I will not tell you whhat to write about.

Also.. First to 3 votes will win.. and I do have the power to close it at 3 votes.. or 2 votes ko


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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-22-05 at 03:09 PM

Must drop verse in 10000 minutes after check in.


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Old 03-19-05, 04:50 PM   #2
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Old 03-19-05, 05:18 PM   #3
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Old 03-23-05, 10:47 PM   #4
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Do not post your verse here. You must use the form in the first post
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Old 03-23-05, 10:48 PM   #5
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Good Fortune

growing up in a small town, where society's overrun by trends
all you can do is frown, surrounded by your artificial friends
even though it means nothing in the end, they keep wearing their lies
no one really has a hand to lend, like cruetly is some sort of prize
and everybdoy displays a disguise, the truth might spoil their image
no kind, welcoming smiles, just exclusion and long looks of grimace
to portray a unique style, is an automatic ticket to loneliness
unless you fashion what everyone else does, its like you dont exist
but most judge amiss, and take pleasure from causing disruption
no need to cut wrists for a world that has been taken by corruption
young minds have been poisoned, everyone sorted into different classes
some kids getting beat up and robbed for as little as wearing glasses
almost fascists, and this kind of treatment should never happen
why should you be ridiculed wheather love rock and roll or rappin
yet everyones laughing, but violence and hate continue to form
were waiting for the calm, but already were engulfed by a storm
swimming in arrogance, our brains are fogged with incoherance
insensible thought, thinking one is greater, solely by appearance
and these are the problems, people you hang with, or the clothes you wear
certain dialogue, a different race, sports, even the colour of your hair
friend or foe, self-expression shouldnt matter, we breath the same air
life is taken for granted, because people would rather be a millionaire
adolescence has taught me, as a youth you are constantly delerious
so quick to be furious, and taking high school status far too serious
now a days, social rank is getting blown way out of proportion
too many people are being blinded by the illusion of good fortune
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Old 03-24-05, 02:34 AM   #6
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Aiight i didnt know i only had an hour left so i gotta get this done in 50 mins and i use time for topicals but im dope so oh well good luck kes


Life is deminished, Get nothing in return, Only strife for riches
My luck ran out the night my wife, Recieved her final kisses
I used to play the lottery, Hoping and dreaming for that chance
To be able to pull big bills from the pockets on my pants
Then my wife got cancer, And God never heard my question
Where is the answer?!?! What!.. My life has no progression
My fortune ran out, Hospital bills, Rent and mostly gorceries
I used to give out money whenever a bum was approcahing me
Now im the one on the corner, Wishing someone would give me a buck
But relentless time passes, And yet God still hasn't given me luck
I choose to let go.. Because there's no possibilty of advancement
But with a family, All my desires to die get thrown in the trash-bin
And thats when it happened, Hastily my luck turned for the best
I won the lottery, No more dead end jobs, No earning the checks


My fortune changed, I was once a non-vivacious human being
But with my money, Im traveling to the places i havent seen
A placement in my dream, Where my family, Can be exuberant
And now i can own a house, And never have to screw with rent
My life was never sane, From a life wasted, To a man deranged
But fortune has filled my days, No more pleading for change
No more hustling, Pitiful jobs, Working, Trying to be materialized
Because for the first time in my life, There's a glare in my eyes
But not a bad essence, Not one that could steal your presence
The kind where my family can have presents in a matter of seconds



A lavish life, Scandalous stolen items are a thing of the past
Luxurious items, Being poor is now a feeling thats passed
No more walking the streets, An intolerable man with no vision
Heaven seemed so far away, But now it feels less than inches
Too bad this didnt occur, I was never born because of
abortion
But at least this dream, Showed me, Happiness and good fortune
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Old 03-24-05, 03:59 PM   #7
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Shit...nice drops by both of you...

Kesse... That's our home city and a half man...shit...
 
Old 03-24-05, 11:23 PM   #8
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word........................red bull = not gay....
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Old 03-26-05, 09:34 PM   #9
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sooo, up this, i guess..............................
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Old 03-26-05, 09:52 PM   #10
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Old 03-27-05, 11:56 PM   #11
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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

Holy fuck this was close. Dont' do that again, make it easier on me next time, and please one of you drop wack. That would make this alot easier.
Bastards.

I'm going to have to vote, flow. I liked his storyline approach to this, it was simple, but it was complex in it's own way. You both had good grammar, and concept developing. Since flows was a storyline approach it did have more concept developing, well easier to acknowledge ones. Kesse, do not get me wrong yours was dope. This battle completly had to do with my mood, if I didn't just read a book, I probably would've voted Kesse, but I did.

Props to both of you for the tight battle.

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Old 03-28-05, 12:59 PM   #12
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good look on feedback... appreciate it ... upping...
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Old 03-29-05, 07:54 PM   #13
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Voted For: Kesse

wow i really think kesse got this, flow i thought ur verse didnt have much content.. u werent saying much just useless little tid bits of info.. your verse was good nice vocab and everything but the emotion just wasnt there.. the only REAL nice part you had was like the last couple lines in italic print... Kesse your verse was pretty nice u had decent imagery.. a pretty good story line.. your still lacking emotion but you didnt do bad.. it seemed like u were over-vocabbing.. but u still had enough to win this with the imagery...
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Old 03-31-05, 01:53 AM   #14
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Very dope battle.

No vote...Kesse is ma boi.
 
Old 04-04-05, 07:14 PM   #15
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Voted For: Kesse

This was a very good battle..

kesse.. Whoa!! You hella surprised me with your verse.. I really thought u were gonna come weak but surprsingly you came hard as hell.. This by far is your best verse yet.. You have very good vocab on here, and a pretty good storyline connecting it too life and how good fortune blinds us... Thats something I wouldn't even thought of doing.. well maybe if i tried but i barely do lol.. your structure was pretty nice.. and your flow was on point.. but nice job..
9/10

Flow:
Alright man.. you sorta dissapointed me on this one.. the beggining was sorta weak, but still had pretty good vocab... unlike kesse's... you had way better imagery because you drew a picture of you being in that corner begging for money wen he just talked about how we are blind... your's really wasn't that creative as well because this is something I would of done.. yeah i know you said you had 50 minutes to do it.. (oh n nyce job by the way for doing a good verse within a short time..) but it just wasn't as creative.. The best part too me basiclly was your last line..
8/10

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