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Expired battle close - win

my bad i messed up so heres the corrections for the battle allik.

allik war has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-29-05 05:16 PM.

Dopium has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-30-05 09:38 PM.

A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.
possessd pausing in stance gaze at her house address.
Knocking on her door patiently waiting for a answer.
She opened up to find out shes a belly dancer.
walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.
hearts racing fast feels like a formula 1 race pulling tons.
She winks at me and laughs and her smiles as good as the sun.
Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried.
Couldn’t make up my mind to be embarrassed or to run and hide.
No appetite and I havn’t ate a single meal in hours.
Reached in my jacket to pull out a bouquet of flowers.
Something in me seemed to seize
I blink a couple times and I can finally see
Now that im talking I feel I cant quit never leavin I wont make it
Walkin lonely now and I cant face the truth to brace it.
Goin home no one to love on or hug
an even no one for me to give back rubs.
Only to wake up and see shes lying beside
Now living our lifes one day at a time.



it's a fast freestyle on topicals so i know that the structures off but that can be fixed.

allik if you don't post up here by tomarrow morning at 9 am then you get a auto ko.

Ok allik since you didnt post up man your loss but thanks for the ko bro.

lol fuckin herb

good angel-lower case
bad angel-capital letters
me-(........)......get the picture?

(damn i really like this chick but i dunno wut 2 do,)
HOMIE CALL THE BITCH UP N TELL HER U WANNA SCREW,
nah man jus call her n say wuts up cuz that aint kool 2 do,
MAN FUCK HIM DAWG CALL HER ASS OVA N HAND HER A BREW
dont listen 2 him.....he's gonna end up screwin things up 4 u
(man both of u shut up....quit fightin n tell wut 2 do)//

IM TELLIN U DAWG FUCK THE STUPID SLUT,
JUS BEND THE BITCH OVER AND PUT IN HER BUTT,
man ur jus nuts how u kno this girl a slut,
(CUZ I HIT HER LAS NITE AFTER JUS 1 CUP//

MAN JUS CALL HER,TELL HER 2 COME OVER,
GIVE HER A DRINK N SAY WE DONT NEED NO RUBBER,
BEND HER OVER THE TABLE RITE THERE & FUCK HER,
man this shit almost over,and u aint even called her,
(oh shit is to late? i dont kno?.............ima call her,)
HELL NO HE'S NOT CUZ I HID THE GIRLS NUMBER,
CUZ SHE A FREAKY BITCH DAT I MET LAS SUMMER,
your wrong man but yo send her my way,cuz i wanna play....
(......................thats fucked up ya'll..................)
too bad,so sad...................MAN WUT A BUMMER!...

aint my best but i dont care....u people hate 2 much on here n e ways so i kno my shit gonna lose 2 hate votes....although half u chumps swear they not yet u peep my otha threads u can tell they started talkin shit 2 me n still at it so it gotta b a hate vote or dick ridin or both ut n e ways its the new year and i plain jus dont give a fuck....fuck ya'll if u dont like me.....im not here 4 ya'll im here 4 myself so fuck ya'll hataz peace...oh uppin this shit now!!!!!!

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my new shit peep

(man both of u shut up....quit fightin n tell me wut 2 do)//...mis type but cant fix on edit on battles cuz well u kno...so there it is so ya'll not like yo wut he mean by that?

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my new shit peep

@ your verse shits sucks mad dick compared to mine.

Voted For: Dopium

DOPIUM takes wit better creativty, invovlement of the action, and for better wordplay wit the topic...........NUFF SAID


ALIK that type of topical style is a one way ticket to defeat........up ur topical homes....................




v/ DOPIUM
IP:


A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.-

walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.-

Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried.
Couldn’t make up my mind to be embarrassed or to run and hide.

best lines.


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Voted For: allik war

well Alikk Your Structure Was Aigght But Your Scheme Was Horrible No Flow Switches Or Nothing THe Acual Verse Was Whack As Well Lmao..I Dunno WHat To Say Im Stunned By The Whackness
Aigght Lemme Say

Nothing Vs

A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.

Alik You been Owned,Dopium Your Emotion And Im agery Was Good Makes You Think Your In The Scene,Well I Liked This Peice Especially:
walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.
hearts racing fast feels like a formula 1 race pulling tons.
She winks at me and laughs and her smiles as good as the sun.
Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried

Very Nice Verse

This Was Just A Easy Win For Dopium

Vote/Dopium

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OYD MAFIA

Shit

Switch The Vote Homie Sorry.........................

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OYD MAFIA

Voted For: Dopium

Is this like a topical battle, cuz there was no topic stated. But I'm a vote on who had the better verse. Dopium I think takes this shit, his verse to me had more feeling to it, it had emotion and imagery, something that adds to the verse. Also, Allik War just seemed to rip off that Guilty Conscience song by Eminem and Dre and he made it total bullshit. I get the idea, but it wasn't used well and the execution was ridiculous. The rhyming was off in places and in some it was non-existent. Dopium for me had a little complexity to his verse, for a quick freestyle it was nice, kept a certain level of consistency and just held my attention a bit more. Allik's was real weak and corny, and after about 6 lines I felt like not voting.

V/ - Dopium

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