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Old 10-05-04, 11:01 AM   #16
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Voted For: Ice Pick

this was an easy win i think.................
no offense yvonne, u were just outclassed.............

Ice Pick..............
tight ass verse, hot wordplay as usual, flow was gud, structure cud have been better, couple lines stretched, hard punches and personals, overall a good verse.



13-16 huh ::ha-doo-kin:: i-assault-with a fire-ball-hit you wack bitch
Vonne now just sit back and continue to admire-raw-shyt you cant spit
nice lines, gud punch, the first line i liked better with the ryu shit in it!!!!

i'll leave u roped-in-knots then pull ur "ears" like shoe-laces ,you dont eat emcee's Yvonne stop lying
You switched ya name so much like saimese twins ur known for havin two-faces and look at ya record you should start trying
nice punches, but the lines are pretty stretched man!! gud shit though!!!


yvonne, u spit aight, a couple of nice punches in there but nuthin too special. ure flow was gud, ure structure too cud use a little work. try more complex rhymin and better wordplay though, and most importantly stop explainin ure votes. people dont like that!!!

Ur punches will never burn a livin flesh..they just ICED b4 u thro ‘em in ya spit
So,im astonished how u PICK me thinking 2 rip,when I just knocked u out like in ya sig
u attempted to play on his name, but i dont think it worked out that well. try bein more creative, like, an ice pick is used in the film Basic Instinct, try incorporatin it into a punch, or just think of wat ice pick's are used for and use it like that or sumthin!!!!

pointer yvonne, rap against ppl who are more ure own level before u start goin after the big guns!!!
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Old 10-05-04, 11:08 AM   #17
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13-16 huh ::ha-doo-kin:: i-assault-with a fire-ball-hit you wack bitch
Vonne now just sit back and continue to admire-raw-shyt you cant spit
no..could of been better
like elves i "(w)rap-with-skill-and-accuracy" while you sit in your crib So?
i'll bring u "down to earth" like atmospheric-gravity busting you with real lines Ho
played, dont like it
rate me just a 7 or an 8.. i wont be upset cuz i'm still "above U" on-the-keyboard
i'm not a fuckin horse so why are u "jockin-me-for?" you fuckin R V whore
i'll leave u roped-in-knots then pull ur "ears" like shoe-laces ,you dont eat emcee's Yvonne stop lying
You switched ya name so much like saimese twins ur known for havin two-faces and look at ya record you should start trying
the "above u" line was ok and the last line was ok as well

.................................................. .

Yvonne...

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Now I don’t wanna fuck ur brain up so ima use a simple lang*
Its crazy how u wash out 58 stains..ur mouth has gatta be big bang
had the idea...
You zombie walking in d rap game,b4 u know it u soon get a ball on ya face**
The only place u rap is in my ass..cos on herre oldies aint got no more space***
dont like it
This dude thinks he got eyes to see muh fuckers on the RapVerse site
When its his skull we see..cos he been sucked dry outta too much B-bite****
ok...i guess
Ur punches will never burn a livin flesh..they just ICED b4 u thro ‘em in ya spit
So,im astonished how u PICK me thinking 2 rip,when I just knocked u out like in ya sig
ok....sig punches are weak though


Yvonne wins this battle for a better overall verse
i felt that she/he has a few more on track less played
harder hitting punches then pick did, try to get rid of explaining your verses to people, dont explain why you threw
a punch or a personal and pick try not to use so mane brackets or quotes kind of makes the reader not interested
in readin your verse much.

V/ Yvonne
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Old 10-05-04, 11:12 AM   #18
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YOU CAN SUCK MY DICK

YOU ARE A WACK FAGGOT

NO SKILL AND DUDE I WOULD FUCKIN CRUSH YOU

PLAIN AND SIMPLE



like elves i "(w)rap-with-skill-and-accuracy" while you sit in your crib So? Personal
i'll bring u "down to earth" like atmospheric-gravity busting you with real lines Ho also another personal

Look at her fuckin PROFYLE

SKANO IS WEEK AND THE NBEW RAPVERSE PUSSY
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Old 10-05-04, 11:25 AM   #19
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ice pick i neva xpected u to be this cheeky mayne.....



judge & jury.........i wanna elevate thats y im facin y'all vets...period!!!...cos if i keep battlin nu bees or peeps "of my level" i aint neva gon elevate that would be accumulating wins for nothin sake.....



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Old 10-05-04, 12:51 PM   #20
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Voted For: Ice Pick

aight...ok battle here...ice pick...good verse....vocab was good...u had some nice wordplay and the punches came quite hard..some alright personals in thurr aswell..flow was ok...structure was ok..overall....decent verse...

yvonne....another ok verse....altho..i dont think ya punches were has hard...but u came wit the more personals...u just need to add stronger punches in thurr....increase ya vocab aswell...ya structure and flow was good too...overall ok verse

this was an ok battle...but punches take it every time so amna av to go wiv ice pick....

my vote=ice pick
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Old 10-05-04, 04:24 PM   #21
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Up Up And Away
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Wouldnt That Be Somthing
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Old 10-05-04, 05:29 PM   #22
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lol assasin i would make my vocab phat if i could but take me outta italy first....lol


thanx for the feedback tho


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Old 10-06-04, 11:25 AM   #23
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Old 10-06-04, 03:22 PM   #24
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aiyo...my vote was explained...i dunno what happened, but oh well, i tried
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Old 10-06-04, 03:29 PM   #25
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i thought that Yvonne won this battle, his punches hoit harder and he had A LOT more personals that Ice pick did, good job to the both of you but Yvonne took this one due to his punches, structural differences, and his personals hit a LOT harder.. the other dude barely had any..

v/ Yvonne

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Old 10-06-04, 03:30 PM   #26
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^sorry, change that i meant to vote for Yvonne, get a mod to change it.
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Old 10-06-04, 05:16 PM   #27
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Yeah i had personals asshole

Reads her fuckin profile

in her crib so is one

real lyrics is another

you say you eat emcees is the third

YOU FUCKIN WACK ASS FUCKIN IDIOT
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Old 10-07-04, 04:45 AM   #28
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...just cant wait to bring this JOKE to an end....ughh


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Old 10-07-04, 12:18 PM   #29
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Old 10-08-04, 03:20 PM   #30
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