Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

lets make this quick...

Im bringin tears to this kid, you dont have the clearance to spit
You get no hope, cuz even if i no-showed, my spirit would win
^^DOES THIS RHYME?
I'll crucify you and your words, since you let our verbs cross
It's like i work at Olive Garden the way i left this herb tossed
^NICE META..HAHA
You raw kid... ? Stop it!.... im ahead of you, like egyptians with watches
When 'push comes to shove' your punches miss more than 'lethargic moshpits'
^AGAIN NICE WORDPLAY N META

switch it

Im 'Focus'ed like 'Ford's .. I'll batter and abuse this cat
This dude is wack, Even biters wouldnt re-use his raps
^^KINDA PLAYED...BUT DECENT
Treadmills aint keepin ya 'waist in fit' two of us and u place in fifth
Your jus a waste of spit.. replace ya lips with ya ass, cuz you tastin shit
^^THIS WAS PRETTY FUNNY
Death Vision claims he's sick ? thats the right word but the wrong idea
Your skills come up too short.. like average height in North Korea
^^HA,,LIKE THIS BAR..VERY ORIGINAL

Punchline's have ya crew hoppin and prancing in hot sand
Because my verses make LC look like a retarded pop band
^^^NOT REALLY FEELIN THIS
I wanted to get personal on this dude, but i'll still win by far
Puttin a noob against a vet, no one even knows who u are
^^THIS WAS AIIGHT I GUESS

Done-

DEATH VISION
the existance of ya whole crew is useless ya'll irrelevant
tha flow is heaven sent some say it's even intelligent
^^HMM THIS AINT REALLY A PUNCH
tha rhymes is crazy call it flung fury yall some bitches
aiyo fuck this hung jury i'll leave all of 'em in stitches
^^AGAIN...THIS AINT REALLY HITTIN
little snitches; stay in tha place of a child fuckin adolesence
sayin prayers hopin we dont murda u nigga count ya blessings
^^NO THIS IS A STATEMENT..NO PUNCH
half ya crew sounds white they bite.....fuckin net dorks
i'm sayin this shit 4 tha south nigga......FUCK NEW YORK!
^^ANOTHER STATEMENT NO PUNCH
fuck tha jury fuck tha judge nigga fuck tha district
matta fact if u don't feel me fuck whoeva's listenin
^^NO
convert these niggaz at birth like they christians
like J Gutta u only wanna battle cuz u feelin Cataclysm
^^BIT BETA
come off ya high horse mothafucka u truly aint a vet
think u harcore nigga u aint even got ya lil nuts wet
^^^I QUITE LIKE THIS..QUITE FUNNY
u niggas u tha best i'll win no contest dis a gut check
this is a easy victory like a brawl between red n ruffnecks
^^TOO BASIC
I spit flame u cant contain my punches and metas
u sweet like 16 nigga my flows turn ya body vanilla
^DNT RHYME
creating names under false pretences u far from smart
u ignorrant, inarticulate ya brains is fillin for pop tarts
^^HMMMM..NOT FEELIN IT
i'm a mastermind wit a disaster mind suicidal at best
* leaves tha crowd 2 throw drinks on u like Ron Artest*
^^OK...BETA

OVERALL
FLOW...U HAD PUNCHES IN EVERY BAR, SOME GOOD, COUPLE NOT SO..BUT U DID ENOUGH..U HAD SUM CREATIVE METAS WHICH MADE ME LAUGH.

DEATH .U PROB HAD 1 GUD BAR, MOST OF YA SHIT WAS TOO BASIC, NO REAL METAS OR WORDPLAY,TRY UPPIN YA PUNCHES INSTEAD OF MAKING SIMPLE STATEMENTS.

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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

flow...nice drop yo...ure structure was a little fucked in places...some stretched bars...vocab was gud...sum nice punches, hittin hard...couple of lines that had me laughin hard...pretty creative in places but basic in others...one or two played concepts that didn't really need to be there...overall i think u can do better...i've seen u do better but i don't need to tell you to elevate...7.5/10

deathvision...alright drop...i never seen u before but i was impressed...u had some nice wordplay in there...couple of nice multies...personals were there although not as hard-hittin as flow...not much for creativity u shud try and work on that cuz creative spits are more enjoyable...ure structure was on point with nuthin too stretched...flow was gud but just work on ure punches and u'll go far...overall 6/10


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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

Im bringin tears to this kid, you dont have the clearance to spit
You get no hope, cuz even if i no-showed, my spirit would win
nah
I'll crucify you and your words, since you let our verbs cross
It's like i work at Olive Garden the way i left this herb tossed
pretty decent
You raw kid... ? Stop it!.... im ahead of you, like egyptians with watches
When 'push comes to shove' your punches miss more than 'lethargic moshpits'
flow was too long, punch was aight
Im 'Focus'ed like 'Ford's .. I'll batter and abuse this cat
This dude is wack, Even biters wouldnt re-use his raps
good
Treadmills aint keepin ya 'waist in fit' two of us and u place in fifth
Your jus a waste of spit.. replace ya lips with ya ass, cuz you tastin shit
kinda decent, but weak though
Death Vision claims he's sick ? thats the right word but the wrong idea
Your skills come up too short.. like average height in North Korea
nah not feelin this 1
Punchline's have ya crew hoppin and prancing in hot sand
Because my verses make LC look like a retarded pop band
pretty decent here
I wanted to get personal on this dude, but i'll still win by far
Puttin a noob against a vet, no one even knows who u are
seen this 1 somewhere b4…was okay though


the existance of ya whole crew is useless ya'll irrelevant
tha flow is heaven sent some say it's even intelligent
good
tha rhymes is crazy call it flung fury yall some bitches
aiyo fuck this hung jury i'll leave all of 'em in stitches
nope, weak here
little snitches; stay in tha place of a child fuckin adolesence
sayin prayers hopin we dont murda u nigga count ya blessings
nah, wack here
half ya crew sounds white they bite.....fuckin net dorks
i'm sayin this shit 4 tha south nigga......FUCK NEW YORK!
…what does south & ny got to do wit this? WACK
fuck tha jury fuck tha judge nigga fuck tha district
matta fact if u don't feel me fuck whoeva's listenin
not feelin this 1
convert these niggaz at birth like they christians
like J Gutta u only wanna battle cuz u feelin Cataclysm
decent
come off ya high horse mothafucka u truly aint a vet
think u harcore nigga u aint even got ya lil nuts wet
weak here
u niggas u tha best i'll win no contest dis a gut check
this is a easy victory like a brawl between red n ruffnecks
kinda decent
I spit flame u cant contain my punches and metas
u sweet like 16 nigga my flows turn ya body vanilla
hell 2 the no
creating names under false pretences u far from smart
u ignorrant, inarticulate ya brains is fillin for pop tarts
no mayn
i'm a mastermind wit a disaster mind suicidal at best
* leaves tha crowd 2 throw drinks on u like Ron Artest*
okay decent

overall Era took this one, just came harder in the punches
flow was good & the vocab was aight, serial killer, elevate
some more, those punches you used were weak all the
way through your whole verse, no hate…just elevate

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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

Flow got dis basically cause he had betta punches both had good verse but Flow came harder he stayed on flow the whole time Death didnt come harder and his punches werent as good as usual

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