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Old 08-04-05, 08:44 PM   #16
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Old 08-06-05, 12:51 PM   #17
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RV is racist against topicals I swear.............
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Old 08-06-05, 11:40 PM   #18
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fucka topical........................................... .............................................
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Old 08-13-05, 01:07 AM   #19
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Wow at being up for 2 weels and not a single vote.
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Old 08-16-05, 07:28 PM   #20
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Voted For: soul?uest

SoulQuest- I like this, very decent. I like the Imaginary and the Emoition was good, very awsome. I suggest Nect time use More vocab, you had some but next time use more. I like your flow of this piece had a Poetic Vibe in it. The best aspects in your verse was def the Emotion very Pure and raw. Keep writing. The Concept was very good and plus the Approach of it was decent also.

The Rev-Alright The rev, I felt that you didn't spend that much time on this verse cause something was lacking and that was Emotion (In my Opinion) You had the Imaginary down, but I felt you could've come more vividly Portrait with your Words than that. Use Metaphors or Similies...Feel me? The Best Aspect in your verse was def the Imaginary, wasn't weak nor your best but average.


Conclusion- both drop good verses, but my vote goes to soulquest he had a better verse in my opinion, Much better Emotion and Good IMaginary. Nic eApproahc and Concept. The rev I liekd your verse too but it seem so you could've Come better than that. Your Imaginary was ok didn't seem very detailed and your Emotion wasn't there too.

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Old 08-16-05, 07:30 PM   #21
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Old 08-17-05, 06:19 PM   #22
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1-0...
i guess thats it?

lol
nice verse rev...goodluck. CAN WE GET MORE VOTES????????
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Old 08-28-05, 12:56 PM   #23
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checkin pollz .
 
Old 09-02-05, 12:44 AM   #24
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Old 09-09-05, 11:15 PM   #25
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Voted For: The Revelation

Soul?uest-Good drop here.Again..suicide in topicals is equal to gay in battles.It's played out.But aside from that..good.Lines were good.But the thing is..they weren't placed together well.Like..I saw a lot of filler.Lines that were there...but didn't tie to the topic or anything.And I also thought too many lines described the how the guy felt..like his lips quiver/shivers..too many lines like that.If you understand what I'm saying.

Revelation-DAMN good peice here.I liked it.Esspecially the 2nd verse.Those closing lines were classic.Hook was good.Nice metaphors and shit used to describe the shit.Didn't see much fillers.Good job.

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RTF below...(it's topical as well )
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206909
 
Old 09-10-05, 01:34 AM   #26
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its not suicide dumbfuck. lol. some people....anyway...thanks. damnit rev...this sucks man.
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