Battle Rules:

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No D/R


Topicaleath (since we're Noobs)10 Line's

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-23-04 at 03:43 PM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

Poetikal Panda has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-23-04 02:45 PM.

Vision's Of Serenity & Hope Flutter Softly Away
Light getting More Luminous..Shook ill never see the Light of Day
The Dude Vowed he Would Pay me..Pay me back for My Sin's
Living a Thug's Life Didn't Know which Episode to Begin
Struggling to Grasp the Last Breath that Attempted To Evade
Did'nt see the Bullet's that Originated from the Crip's Escalade
My throat Dryed up like Water Drop's In the Desert Of Sahara
Life & Soul Rapidly Fading Away-Dayum My son Will never Know His Father....
Aight that Shit was Just off the top of Dome...Definely Not my Best shit....G'Luck......

VIvID has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-23-04 03:26 PM.

death is certain, it's justified by life
alive or dead still surpassed by strif
your here today your gone the next
lose of words dyin the ultimate test
cold an stiff your lifeless body rests
u afraid to lose the little u have left
ur legacy forever in peoples memory
if there is a god i beg you for mercy
exhault thee, hold your name high
but question why do people die.

Hey Vivid sorry i didnt meet the Line Requirements do u wanna DQ me or just Keep going?It's up to u .......

no its all good im not a topical battler anyways im more the punch's

i say let the battle go on, nice drop by the way

Voted For: Poetikal Panda

Vision's Of Serenity & Hope Flutter Softly Away
Light getting More Luminous..Shook ill never see the Light of Day
The Dude Vowed he Would Pay me..Pay me back for My Sin's
Living a Thug's Life Didn't Know which Episode to Begin
Struggling to Grasp the Last Breath that Attempted To Evade
Did'nt see the Bullet's that Originated from the Crip's Escalade
My throat Dryed up like Water Drop's In the Desert Of Sahara
^^^^^^^^^^^ BEAUTIFUL IMAGINARY GOOD DEEP STUFF HERE MAYNE NICE SHIT


Life & Soul Rapidly Fading Away-Dayum My son Will never Know His Father....
Aight that Shit was Just off the top of Dome...Definely Not my Best shit....G'Luck......
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NICE CLOSA MAYNE GOOD PIECE HERE

POETIKAL-U HAD AN BEAUTIFUL IMAGINARY I LIKE YA FLOW GOOD WORD-CHOOSIN



death is certain, it's justified by life
alive or dead still surpassed by strif
your here today your gone the next
lose of words dyin the ultimate test
cold an stiff your lifeless body rests
u afraid to lose the little u have left
ur legacy forever in peoples memory
if there is a god i beg you for mercy
exhault thee, hold your name high
but question why do people die.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ THIS IS NOT AN GOOD VERSE ELEVATE USIN MORE IMAGINARY,CREATIVE,AND WORD'S VOCAB

VIVID-U NEED TO ELEVATE THAT WASNT AN GOOD VERSE STR8 LACKED,,,,,,,DIDNT RHYMED PLUS HE DIDNT MADE SENSE
U NEED TO ELEVATE ON USIN WORDS-VOCAB-IMAGINARY-AND CREATIVE-LIKE PAINTIN AN PICURE,,,,,,,THA VERSE WASNT GOOD LACKED

V-POET CAUSE HE HAD BETTA IMAGINARY,CREATIVE,GOOD WORDS,VOCAB IN HIS VERSE

VIVID-ELEVATE ON EVERYTHING ON TOPICALS

~PEACE~ POET RETURN AN FAV IN MY OPEN MIC

THE LIGHTNING DA LINK ITS IN MY SIG MAYNE

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Voted For: Poetikal Panda

poetikal panda:

are you a alias.....because i'm a panda too woot woot!
nice emotional depth in there...........................
story went nice and your vocabulary was good aswell...

vivid:

i really think you should of made the lines longer
so it could become more understandable and better story
but other then that pretty good emotion and depth
was there and everything nice battle

but i have to choose.....ummmm poetikal panda

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ah well what can ya do im not a topical battler

but BK how about u set up a thread n let me son u in a real battle

Upping for this I'll Return the Honest Vote...Pz .......

Upping for this I'll Return the Honest Vote...Pz .......

Voted For: Poetikal Panda

poeitkal took this hands down

vivd: what the fuck was that..only good thing about your verse was your flow..it was dope and it all flowed well together ...other than that...it was SHIT

poetikal...ur decent im feelin ur shit....visionary was ok.....i was feelin this too da fulllest.......

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return da favour......
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=156859

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