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Old 10-15-05, 09:45 AM   #1
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Black Arts vs Mr. Multie

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6 - 10 Lines
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good luck

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 10-15-05 at 10:45 AM

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Old 10-15-05, 09:47 AM   #2
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Black Arts has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 09:47 AM.
 
Old 10-15-05, 09:49 AM   #3
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this is my check i guess.............its bout time somebody accept'd.........i haven't text in a long time lets see if i still got a lil something lmao.......
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Old 10-15-05, 10:01 AM   #4
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How the hell this kid gonna challenge me nigga's a dumb fuck,
Got it more twist then if the mic lead was round his throat6 like nunchucks
i'll disable this kid lyrically, the faggot shit is meaningless,
Jacko could have his hand down your pants, and STILL not be "feelin it"
I'll cut this niggas rhymes outta existance without a doubt
Lyrically I'll break the spine of his rhyme book quicker than Bill bust in Monica mouth
 
Old 10-15-05, 10:02 AM   #5
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This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box..................................
....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2
You can be lost and caught in the rain.............................
................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3
The only way you'll catch wins from me............................
....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4
It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type...................
...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5
And come up with an lame excuse like.............................
......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6
This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7
Gave'em a shot for the win..............................................
................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8
Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9
Black we may have color in common..................................
.......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10


ehh...........something quick y just becuz lmao g/l homie
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Old 10-15-05, 10:04 AM   #6
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explanation:

Jacko had a tune "can you feel it"

drop time was real tight for real
 
Old 10-15-05, 10:13 AM   #7
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Mr. Multie has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-15-05 10:13 AM.
 
Old 10-15-05, 10:16 AM   #8
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This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box..................................
....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2
You can be lost and caught in the rain.............................
................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3
The only way you'll catch wins from me............................
....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4
It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type...................
...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5
And come up with an lame excuse like.............................
......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6
This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7
Gave'em a shot for the win..............................................
................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8
Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9
Black we may have color in common..................................
.......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10


ehh...........something quick y just becuz lmao g/l homie
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Old 10-15-05, 04:51 PM   #9
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Voted For: Mr. Multie

This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box..................................
....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2
This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7
Gave'em a shot for the win..............................................
................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8
Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9
Black we may have color in common..................................
.......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10

VS

badly worded bars...and a few played concept.

you came weak her black.

multie your opener was dope but your structures fucked, fix the ......................................... and -1 shit...you have loadsa potential stay up both.

be sure to rtf.

no hate.
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Old 10-15-05, 05:17 PM   #10
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s'all good anyway but my computer fucked up and i had like 5 mins to post my verse
 
Old 10-15-05, 05:31 PM   #11
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yeah, i knew id seen better from you before..
stay up.
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Old 10-16-05, 04:40 AM   #12
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its all good thanx fo the feed.........oh and the reason i put the *........................* its because its a continue of 1 bar if i left it right there with out the *....................* my structure would really be fuck cuz the syllable count is off so it won't line up ya kno yea im sure you would've done betta maybe we'll battle again in the future Black
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Old 10-16-05, 08:02 AM   #13
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yeh definitely fam.you actually a cool dude for real....
 
Old 10-17-05, 12:05 AM   #14
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This was one-sided... I'm not into the outside of the box line, cuz I heard it used so many times and I have used that idiom in the past as well... but other than that, this was a clean sweep... Mr Multi had better punches, his set-up was wayyy better and the closer was pretty straight... so this ain't no contest, Mr. Multi won.....
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Old 10-17-05, 02:22 AM   #15
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Black Arts
How the hell this kid gonna challenge me nigga's a dumb fuck,
Got it more twist then if the mic lead was round his throat6 like nunchucks
decent at best.
i'll disable this kid lyrically, the faggot shit is meaningless,
Jacko could have his hand down your pants, and STILL not be "feelin it"
eh
I'll cut this niggas rhymes outta existance without a doubt
Lyrically I'll break the spine of his rhyme book quicker than Bill bust in Monica mouth
no, simile was weak

Verse was semi decent.. coulda been better wording, next time try to think up harder pucnhes also :thumbsup:

Mr. Multie
This nigga's a pro? bet you haven't enter'd the zone vet-1
I'd tell'em to think outside the box..................................
....................................but he's not leave'n his home yet-2
this would be better if it wasn't played
You can be lost and caught in the rain.............................
................................................st ill wouldn't be found ill-3
The only way you'll catch wins from me............................
....................................is if you smelled me from downhill-4
eh..
It's obvious i aint knew to this, you the type...................
...........................................that would lie bout dumb shit-5
And come up with an lame excuse like.............................
......................"he's a noob!, i keyed something up quick"-6
lol.. funny
This is easy see ima handle this dude wit ease-7
Gave'em a shot for the win..............................................
................................but he'll lose tryna shoot the breeze-8
lol
Im dope you wack, its safe to say opposites really attract-9
Black we may have color in common..................................
.......but we're not twins so sorry i haven't met my match-10
played

Pretty good verse. Some lines were played, some lines were good. I didnt like that downhill line tho... But you took this battle with better punches and more wit.

V/ Multie, good battle peeps.

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