this was ok.......thought the multis seemed a bit weak....and i would stop with the linking them...we all know what they are dont need to be shown them,,,,,other than that yeah...had a nice flow going, but the vocab could be improved.....sitra tailed off towards the end...

"hey buttercup i slay you humperdinks to get the princess bride"

^^lose lines like this...dont do ya no favours....jus keep at it..pZ