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Wow, I haven't really read your stuff but your pretty dope.
You had a very good emotion in this, a lot of good lines.
I think you need some complexity though...not for this type of poem but if you want to go beyond what you are now.
For instance multies metas and what not.
but this line was amazing....i loved this...
'this emptiness is a pain worth more than suicide
but the solid mask i am wearing tells you otherwise'
^^that was really good.
And your finisher was really hard....good work. Keep it up.
If you got time, peep my 'The Weathers Art'
Thanks
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