Thread: Eminem's Story
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Old 12-24-03, 02:43 PM   #6
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But this was alright...structure in this could have been better, just try to touch it up, some of your lines were kinda stretched out there a bit i thought....try adding some multies to this...vocab was ok....but overall this was alright....keep at it.
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