ur flow was off, but its not bad.....Get urself a structure...base it around syllables and line distance....

Ur vocab need workin on...but that jus means u need to read The Times instead of The Sun.....

Ur topic was messed up due to the shortnes of ur verse...try makin ur verse about 7-10 bars long....a good range for a topic...

thats all really....ur not wack....just bare that in mind...

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