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Old 01-08-04, 12:56 PM   #9
Baron Mynd
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This was actually pretty basic, rhyming was all one yllable, flow was off, it seemed a Really primative piece .. not really a lot to comment on.

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this is how i would spit it and rhyme it:

dis iz an open diss-so any motha fucka can take it/
i aint no gangster, and naah i dont beg it/
u claiming ima wigger-just coz ima holding mo doe/
fuck you bitches-come against me u get blowed/


What's with all the stupid ebonics? Dis, Iz, Naah, Mo, Doe <-- that shit is gay as fuck. Write how you want it to be read, dont include any of that gay bullshit. Ignore the moron who offered that advice.
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