My second piece, this is more of a battle rhyme but I though that i'd put it in here for some imput and shit.

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Ayo, I got heatseeking rhymes that home in on silly cats flaunting subpar raps/
If we battle your jaw will be wired shut while I verbally do surgery to fix that claptrap/
Then it'll open wide like a fucking soprano, or you can get permission from your parents to go mano-a-mano/
But then i'll slap you like E. Honda, put you in a coma, break yo fingaz like Twix bars and swab your eyes out with my bona.../

Hold up a sec, you must be kidding me, your weak rhymes are so disrespactable you may as well spit on me/
But hell naw, go weep to you ma, i'll spin your head with a hook, make you flutter like a helecopta/
Seriously bra, I'd rather not fight ya, how about we switch roles so I can bite from ya/
Sell your weak rhymes on EBAY, in exchange for some modelling clay/
Mold it into a dagger and stab you like in a Shakespear play/

I'm controlling your thoughts like the Big Brother/
Make you kiss the ceiling and then headbutt your mother/
You deviate from the norm but that don't make you tuffa/
It just makes it easier for us to play cops and robbers so I can handcuff ya/
Basically, you're a crack addict, shaking and drooling/
Even if you wore clown make up you couldn't do proper fooling/
So back the fuck down/
Maybe rethink your strategy/
Because you're on your way to becoming the newest dramatic tragedy/