I was feeling some of this but other things were played out.
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ayo u fuckin wit da kid den u fuckin wit da best//
i spit dat shit u can feel under the skin of ya flesh//
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^played
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u wanna act like u big then feel da wrath of this tec//
i bust a nutt on every track becuz rap is like sex//
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^Rap=Sex is a played simile, but not too bad.
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u feel da flows but u really don't feel da kid at all//
cuz im untouchable nigga, and if u try imma break ya jaw//
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^concept is played, but delivery is angry, which is a plus.
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da flows is flawless and my rymes stay sick//
these niggas is ball-less, so all u got is a couple of dicks//
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^Good concept, but you fucked it up with the punchline.
I won't even bother quoting anything more. Basically, it was all played out subject matter. You need to expand your vocab because right now it's basic. Not too bad though, keep dropping.
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