The rhyme scheme was nice but you could have done more with it, I personally don't like people just flowin' bout how they are the best and that they are gonna break jaws, bust caps...etc...it's pointless to type shit like that because half the people on here just runnin there mouth because they can....try comming up with a different topic that has more meaning and use of vocab...structure was nice and it kept ya reading but you might want to try a couple different things next time....keep writtin, it was good!