Nice little battle here...

I feel Sarcasm had the better imagery...

But alot of lines left me like, huh?

The format, rhyme scheme at times, I don't know...
Something was off. Maybe emotion.
Cuz I didn't feel anything reading this...
I couldn't even feel sorry for the tortured girl, you made her so plastic, an object.
Maybe that's how the rhyme was suppossed to work, to show his thoughts and shit in his surreal mindset...
I got that, but as a reader, I need to see the whole picture from all sides. Or at least be able to distinguish reality from his point of view. This just left me blank.

Kost went a totally different route.
He had a song type beat to his, real good flow on this one.
And the humor, imagery, with big time emotion were on point.
I could see where he was coming from right away and it's flow helped vibe this right along.
Not too big on vocab and complexity, but it's the emotion and message that wins it for this one.

Kost

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