Origin...this piece was very thoughtfull and the concept is rather played
but you did a good job in flipping and such....the metaphors in this
were well thought out

on the other hand...
watch your syllable count...some of the words seemed unneeded and
just there for rhyme scheme's sake...10 lines isn't enough i felt robbed
as if you owed me more for the title of the topic...and the ending didn't
seem like an eding to me...

/\best feedback you will ever get

*drop feed on untangible evil*