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01-12-04, 08:35 PM
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Who Am I?
IP: 8391 C711
Who Am I?
The solitude in rhymes dilutes to contribute in conflicting minds Inflictin crimes causing me to salute the forever hardening times Searching for inner diversion leads to aspersion in inner thought Averting to the sub-urban….leaves my opinions lost and bought Changin mind channels to handle the scandals that are exposed I could ramble like lives vandal…...but that aint the path i chose Compelling questions scold sections in the neurons of my brain To lessen my internal fretting but I know ill always be the same Plus my identity aint friends with me which excels complication Death will accour eventully…..till then..fuck the worlds gyrations |
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01-12-04, 08:43 PM
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IP: 6849 A43E
Wow, I expected this to be a blah, original type of piece. This actually is really good. Nice job with the vocab, and I can really see what you were meaning to say. Great job!!!
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01-12-04, 08:46 PM
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IP: 8391 C711
lol
fuck you for the first remark  but thanks man for the 2nd  |
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01-12-04, 08:47 PM
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IP: 6849 A43E
Ahha, but really. Ahha...good job with it. Can you actually "read" my Open Mic...its the only one by me on the first page.
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01-12-04, 09:01 PM
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IP: 8391 C711
lol took me a while but i did it
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01-12-04, 09:03 PM
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Nigga Ima OG.
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IP: 44DD 120C
this was an ok piece..
Ur structure was nice.. ur flow was simple words, but was still coo Concept - hmm.. ight Real short tho... If you could return a reply: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=105888
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01-12-04, 09:15 PM
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IP: 8391 C711
just being original
thanks |
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01-13-04, 07:27 AM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
up^
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01-13-04, 07:13 PM
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IP: 7AF3 56A5
blah
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01-13-04, 08:01 PM
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IP: 002B 997E
Well This Wuz A Pretty Nice Piece, Pretty Original, Good Vocab And Flow Wuz Nice, I Could Tell With Ease What You Were Tryin To Explain With Your Words. Theres Not Really Anything Bad To Say About It Keep It Up Dawg 1
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01-13-04, 08:16 PM
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IP: 7AF3 56A5
thanks man
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01-13-04, 09:04 PM
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IP: 77D5 6AAD
Original concept, .. good vocab usage..solid flow, & nice structure u make me proud..
i really enjoyed this piece, u expressed very well,. = )
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01-13-04, 09:40 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
I liked it................................................ ................................everything was on key holla at me
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01-14-04, 02:01 AM
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IP: 8F29 2687
Origin...this piece was very thoughtfull and the concept is rather played
but you did a good job in flipping and such....the metaphors in this were well thought out on the other hand... watch your syllable count...some of the words seemed unneeded and just there for rhyme scheme's sake...10 lines isn't enough i felt robbed as if you owed me more for the title of the topic...and the ending didn't seem like an eding to me... /\best feedback you will ever get *drop feed on untangible evil* Last edited by Emerge : 01-14-04 at 02:03 AM. |
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01-14-04, 05:56 AM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
lol^
thanks homo |
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