It was an alright verse. Just a little simplitic thats all. Maybe work on your structure and stretch those lines out. You showed alot of potential for poetry, just cause I felt the emotion from a couple of those lines. And no dought, better to let shit down in words. Than go out and do something destructive. Just elevate your wordplay, structure, and add a little zing to it as I say j/p... Aight drop hommie, keep elevating...

( Please return the favor and peep the open mic link in my sig. I took time to look at yours and all, so please take time to look at mine, it would be much appriciated hommie )

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