You did a very nice job with this story. The hook was a great idea, I like how you worked this. Your structure was nice, a little simple on wrodplay at times. But other than that, I really enjoyed this. It was emotional, and is somthing that would happen. So your speaking reality as well, not just a little story. Nice work hommie...

( please return the favor and peep the open mic in my sig. It would be appriciated )

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