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Old 01-15-04, 10:45 PM   #1
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Death's Eyes

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MY ENERGY DROP, read out loud


In the eye's of Death, I've witnessed many acts of assassin,
None as this, a massecist, past his second chances,
"Answer this", the man says malevolently accented,
"what's it like, on the brink of death?!" The man asked him,

I'm sitting back, watching the victim come closer to my realm

"Surely you can't pass, human decency" as deep breaths are taken,
"You still have compassion, you can't bring yourself to that,"....
"TOO LATE, I'm already in the past-tense"
He stabbed him in the chest, blood spurts,
His tongue hurts, but keeps on faster and faster, he pressed,

Both are in shock, both are mine, two for the price of one

And still faster, his body jerks out of control,
Out of the hole, gaping the dead man' heart beats out of control,


The strife is over, their lives are over, they're both mine,
Their flesh & bone is my ambrosia
You're now my soldier, You're life's my dossia, You're now mine,
You're flesh & bone is my ambrosia


The monks of the Shaolin war, souls are mine absorbed into an abyss, and endless door

While the opposition smiles, bodies are to compile,
A mile high, annihalation none more foul,
Hear the silent bellows, violent screams, amongst the quiet,
Shaolin dying, a maelstrom of haunting souls flying,
Deafness from violent killings, seizures giving to assailants,
Senses are lost, blindness from the Eye of Death

The strife is over, their lives are over, they're both mine,
Their flesh & bone is my ambrosia
You're now my soldier, You're life's my dossia, You're now mine,
You're flesh & bone is my ambrosia





This was a quick write up, I want critique because I think I can make this really good, I got the ideas down, but just more....energy.
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