Real nice message, good topic.

Ya flow was pretty good at times...

At others, downright blah.

Your rhyme scheme varies drastically and needs to be one or the other...
Whatever style you choose, stick with one.

This rhyme had about 3 at least.

Still, a good read, didn't suck, and was very topical/current event.

Peace

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