I read both, work on your wrod play. That is way to simplistic to ahve bars that short. Also, your using alright vocab, but not using it at the right times. You have potential, but this just seems like another write to me. It has nothing to really symblify the fact that its you. And that no one else can use your style...
I hope that helped out a little bit, keep elvating hommie...

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