ha...i had to leave feed on this...i wont leave a real big breakdown but I'll giveu my honest opinion...

rhyming was aight....liked the ryhme scheme of ur piece...

(My whole life has been for you, all I planned to do
Was be the man you choose,but can’t understand the rules
When I win I lose, it seems for you there’s no pleasing
Got beat for no reason, I think I did good,but still on the floor pleading
My hearts bleeding, hurt but still needing your acceptance
Can’t you see I’m your reflection, I’m a man you must respect it)


flow- i know this doesnt matter in text, but you tried to force your ryhmes into one line and it makes the verse lines unsymetrical....remember, pieces are more enjoyable to read if they look clean

concept-i always dug the conversation aspect of keystyles....i did something similar..a very real but moving topic and concept...


overall- a decent piece....just keep working on rewording and metaphors and youll get better...