This was kind of nice. Normally, a piece of these proportions / boundaries wouldn't please me, you know. But, the dialogue between characters set off a bit of an internal chuckle. It wasn't exactly technically sound, but you made up for it with your storytelling abilities. . Vocabulary could be more complex, which goes the same for the rest of the literary devices. The flow was pretty nice. It was worth reading, & introduced me to somebody I'd never read of. Keep writing, man.

Quality
P.S. I'm the owner of a certain topical league that could use some new talent - AIM: RalphsBagels, if you are at all interested.

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