ok... well let me say this about it... the flow was blah... wasn't moving... it was stagnant... I read it a few times... it just wasnt a good flow to me... More like a text god flow... which is el garbo outside of battles... for the simple fact... if it's an open mic it should be a song sooner or later... if this had no intention of ever being a song... then... great flow... but if it did... flow was bland fam... sorry...
and yes I will say...
from here...
I Made It This Far.. Though, It Still Worries Me To Think..
Im Sailing On A Love Boat In Such A Hurry To Sink..
I Put Failing Above Hope As My Tears Blurry The Ink..
Im Bailing w/ Enough Rope To Jump From The Brink..
Of Heart Break..
Cause My Heart Makes Decisions Before My Smarts Wake..
So Before I Take Part In More Dark Days..
I Park Fate..
& Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate..
Once Again..Love's Date To Embark Waits..
Until The Delay Causes Us To Stray & Part Ways..
As Cupid's Harp Plays..
And I Fall Back Into The Abyss Of Lonliness...
Alone To Reminess...
Was Love At My Lips Or Was It Only A Kiss..
to there... flow was better... but the rhyme scheme was boring...
Sorry Rich... I'm just not feelin this one family...