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01-26-04, 02:36 PM
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Only A Kiss.....
IP: D79C 2834
Love Rose From The Depths Of Lonliness..
Alone Till It Eventually Exposed Its Only Kiss.. From Her Lips It Grows Slowly In My Heart.. Showing Me How Phoney I've Been Thus Far.. Unknowingly, The Part I've Played Was Fake.. Apparently I Thought I Never Made a Mistake.. Cause That Would Mean I Was Able To Break.. So I Write My Life Through The Fables I Make.. But Now Im Trying To Shake This Lable Away.. & Take Tommorow To Turn The Tables On Today.. I've Ate So Much Pain.. Its Time To Drain The Sorrow.. Feelings Were Weak & My Emotions Were Borrowed.. I Made It This Far.. Though, It Still Worries Me To Think.. Im Sailing On A Love Boat In Such A Hurry To Sink.. I Put Failing Above Hope As My Tears Blurry The Ink.. Im Bailing w/ Enough Rope To Jump From The Brink.. Of Heart Break.. Cause My Heart Makes Decisions Before My Smarts Wake.. So Before I Take Part In More Dark Days.. I Park Fate.. & Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate.. Once Again..Love's Date To Embark Waits.. Until The Delay Causes Us To Stray & Part Ways.. As Cupid's Harp Plays.. And I Fall Back Into The Abyss Of Lonliness... Alone To Reminess... Was Love At My Lips Or Was It Only A Kiss.. |
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01-26-04, 02:40 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
..very nice piece..your content,I'm loving it..I guess I'm more setimental than I thought..your imagery was nice..and your emotions shown through out the piece was excellent..your flow was consistent..and wordplay was great..great topical piece...
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01-26-04, 02:42 PM
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"The Eleete"
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IP: FAD9 BD2A
Daaaaaamn dawg that shit was deep..........i loved the piece one ill keep in my books.........for friends to read.........
Of Heart Break.. Cause My Heart Makes Decisions Before My Smarts Wake.. So Before I Take Part In More Dark Days.. I Park Fate.. & Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate.. Once Again..Love's Date To Embark Waits.. Until The Delay Causes Us To Stray & Part Ways.. As Cupid's Harp Plays..-------probably my favorite part of all.....damn man good shit no doubt...........anyway hit me up......look up my most recent piece called: YOUR MY WORST ENEMY or click one of my links......thanks.....but anyway nice drop.......... |
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01-26-04, 03:03 PM
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OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
Thanks
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01-26-04, 03:15 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: E38C 4580
Real Nice Piece Here Man. . Imagery Was Good Throughout. . You Helped Improve The Content, Which Was Dope. . I Think The Sentimental Pieces Are Dope Cause They Show Your Actual Emotions. . Multi's Helped The Flow. . Which Was Consistent. . Feeling This Man. . Pz.
Park Fate.. & Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate.. ^ ^ That was the dopest part to me. . You leave love alone long enough with a chick and it comes back to haunt you. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109846 ^ ^ Lemme get some Feed. . Thanks.
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01-26-04, 03:58 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
read like you put alot of emotion into it... i think it was helped by the wording you used, most being a round the same amount of syllables, it really got the flow going along with the mulits... ive seen the topic before, but you didnt come at it played... nice drop
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01-27-04, 08:06 AM
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OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
Appreciated
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01-27-04, 08:12 AM
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IP: F6B0 1A5F
yea i really enjoyed reading this piece from start to finish, deep stuff and well executed.
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01-27-04, 08:34 AM
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IP: 6F9E F23B
nice.......nice......nice...makes a change from all the
depressing pieces or gangstreish and this showed emotion nad feeling.....9/10 blud |
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01-27-04, 09:06 AM
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[.Eclipse.]
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IP: 90A0 94DE
Evolve is switching over on us... Nice drop.
Flow was beautiful... Rich N.I. has made the switch to open micer.
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01-27-04, 09:09 AM
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OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
Lol.. ^^^
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01-27-04, 09:51 AM
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IP: A092 9E01
Evo you know you my boy n' all but...
I didn't like this... at all...  well I did like the imagery... but that's all... flow was blah... didn't make me wanna keep reading... I don't know fam... it's... *sigh* you know..?I think you should redo this... get more metas in there... make it flow a bit more... well maybe it's me... I'd rather drop more into a bar than less naw mean..? If I have too... all in all... I'm sorry... no impressed... *hands you a dollar* Get me a super size fry...  |
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01-27-04, 10:04 AM
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OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
WOW.. are you serious... Im gonna have to disagree with you on this Av... the flow was on point all the way through...
you mean too tell me this doesn't flow I Made It This Far.. Though, It Still Worries Me To Think.. Im Sailing On A Love Boat In Such A Hurry To Sink.. I Put Failing Above Hope As My Tears Blurry The Ink.. Im Bailing w/ Enough Rope To Jump From The Brink.. Of Heart Break.. Cause My Heart Makes Decisions Before My Smarts Wake.. So Before I Take Part In More Dark Days.. I Park Fate.. & Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate.. Once Again..Love's Date To Embark Waits.. Until The Delay Causes Us To Stray & Part Ways.. maybe you need to read this again... |
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01-27-04, 10:41 AM
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IP: 06EF 4E9D
felt da emotion.....deep piece.............props on da work of art...flow was on point, simple rhyme scheme but it still suited it
stay up |
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01-27-04, 10:56 AM
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I'm an alias...
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IP: A092 9E01
ok... well let me say this about it... the flow was blah... wasn't moving... it was stagnant... I read it a few times... it just wasnt a good flow to me... More like a text god flow... which is el garbo outside of battles... for the simple fact... if it's an open mic it should be a song sooner or later... if this had no intention of ever being a song... then... great flow... but if it did... flow was bland fam... sorry...
and yes I will say... from here... I Made It This Far.. Though, It Still Worries Me To Think.. Im Sailing On A Love Boat In Such A Hurry To Sink.. I Put Failing Above Hope As My Tears Blurry The Ink.. Im Bailing w/ Enough Rope To Jump From The Brink.. Of Heart Break.. Cause My Heart Makes Decisions Before My Smarts Wake.. So Before I Take Part In More Dark Days.. I Park Fate.. & Let It Remain Idle For So Long That It Starts Hate.. Once Again..Love's Date To Embark Waits.. Until The Delay Causes Us To Stray & Part Ways.. As Cupid's Harp Plays.. And I Fall Back Into The Abyss Of Lonliness... Alone To Reminess... Was Love At My Lips Or Was It Only A Kiss.. to there... flow was better... but the rhyme scheme was boring... Sorry Rich... I'm just not feelin this one family...
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