when working with this kinda structure, making a poem off a few words, you have to be carefull, and it can be hard. for you have to make sure that it makes sence and isnt jumping all over the place, plus making sure it doesnt seemed forced just so it starts with that letter, it still should seem natural. thats really the one thing i didnt like with this piece, is at times some lines seemed forced, and didnt really contribute anything to the poem. i also felt emotions werent shown as well as they could have been and that detail could be added.

~Tera~
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